John_Or - Profile

Good writing quality and world background. The characters however, would need a bit more diversity. They all seem to be the egoistic types. The mc though is a villain and a psychopath that deserves no sympathy. Not an antihero. He totally deserves what he got in the first few chapters - getting ditched and fed to the dogs. Also, he is much more pathetic and petty than these so called young masters that does not care a bit about the support classes.

Lol. Honestly no offense here and please don't make it sound like it's spiritual or something, cuz you Yoruba people heh!. Just checked your name and I can see we are from the same tribe. I already noticed you are Nigeria with the "Oga" I saw yesterday. Anyway I was just making some comments and same with you and we are all just having fun. So I hope you have a good night 👍

And what exactly do you mean by "Una dey think first oo (no offense)" state clearly whatever you want to say.

I do not want to have this conversation if you act like you nvr read the novel. I asked you what he did to get so much power exactly in my last comment so why are you asking me ? And if i might add, this is a novel with a "system tag" and even if the Author nvr stated it to be so obvious the abilities he got is more than overpowered, every single one of them, not just the three he got from G.O.D, even those he got from Kravel. In fact every one of the six runes he got from Kravel is better than some stated divine abilities.

If some part of the novel gives you thrills and makes you continue to read, good for you. But to say I'm biased because I stated the obvious, that means you are biased. I NVR said the novel was a bad one and people could love what they read for several reasons, I just mentioned some inconsistencies where things looks shady.

If a novel has this many inconsistency in less than 20 chapters, what do you think will happen in 100 ? And you expect me to read more ? No hard feelings ? Funny right. Anyone who reads a lot of novels would know the signs of a bad novel or a passionate writer/Author who puts low effort into their books in the first few chapters. Why would anyone read more just to feel like they have wasted their time at later chapters or hope to "unread" the novel if possible.

(Ogbení) if you read the novel you would know why it's ridiculous to say he got strong thru hard work. which hard work pls ?

This sort of thing is not common. Slavery comes in many forms. This kind of slavery where you just go up straight to someone who was nvr your enemy, of same race and almost no difference in strength and you just walk up straight to them and forcefully turn them to your slaves is pathetic and disgusting. And it's most surprising how everyone especially the enslaved just took it like nothing happened it's ridiculous.

By the way this is just to mention a few in less than 20 chapters

I don't know why you guys are giving this story such high rating. I mean this story is below average at best. So what exactly is the problem ? 1. It's quite ridiculous how the G.O.D is portrayed. He obviously isn't smart or knowledgeable and doesn't act like a "god". Same with Kravel, too impulsive and easily manipulated. 2. Author made MC look like he is selecting Divine abilities others don't want, when even an idiot knows he just selected the most game breaking abilities ever. It's funny no one selected them when it's so overpowered and other abilities also have ridiculous restrictions. 3. MC became OP when he hardly put in any effort and so early in the novel too. And i'm not even at chapter 20 yet!

He became OP through hard work ? This must be a joke

I'm already about 20 chapters into the novel and I can say this is one of the most inconsistent and confused story o have read. World background is so shallow, character development is trash, story is almost non-existent. Plot, stories and events are not well explained it is more like the Author is in a rush and gives half information. Power system is just terrible, and characters seem behave strangely and inconsistent. In short although Author might have a good idea or story, this is poorly written with not much preparation or any form of proof reading.

I wonder how this story has that much rating. The whole story feels so full of negative and bad vibes, plus nobody seems to notice it's a kid we talking about here. It's just ridiculous

Yeah I can write mine and I'm sure it would be better. To be a good author is to listen to opinions and a read a lot of stories and improve on writing. I've read so many stories on webnovel and other platforms online or offline and I can tell u you need to improve. Don't just take everyone telling you u need to improve they don't like your story.

You can't blame poor story writing on people not liking the story. You need to understand that every story must have a plot line, character, and story that follows certain principles. You can't write anything and expect everyone to just take it as it is. Improve on your writing

Yh the grammar got better thanks, 👍

I forgot to add the characters need to be developed better too.

This novel is ok as at chapter 103, the world background was ok,the story is good. But... There is alot of problems with the writing quality, alot of errors with the writing plus the story lacks detail in a lot of ways either with the quests, classes, equipments and even the story plots. For instance how long did the tutorial last. MC made a comment to the new initiates dying of thirst in the early chapters but we never saw this happen. The quest for water was a total flop, the group went out once and that was it no further updates. Though I assume it was a failure but after that was another plot and then the end. In shot Author needs to develop story better - more details.