Valoren - Profile

Agreed. At least from what I’ve read so far, the premise and imagination of the story really lends itself to something that could be great, but the execution is extremely lacking. Random flash backs, bad placement, info dumping (literally 70% of the info you learn is through description instead of action or dialogue) like pls show stop telling. The quirkiness of characters and description of them I can get by, but when you literally can’t stay immersed in the scene or story for longer than maybe four paragraphs…

Best book ever on here written before, need more words.

High quality writing, unique power systems, massive world and story-scape while doing a great job including all kinds of fantasy concepts we know and love and some that are brand new. Overall deserving of both my first review and it being a five star, even if not my number one favorite of all time. (Reserved eternally for magi world abyssal lord) The singular flaw I believe it has is that the author does seem to make very few but consistent grammatical mistakes, but again they are very few but consistently the same ones which is why I’m pointing it out. That being the case, it means they have extremely simple solutions, and once the author knows about them, they should be Uber easy to fix going forward. From using “couldn’t agree less” when it’s very obvious from context that “couldnt agree more” was what was meant to be said (many times, in the same situations, indicating it’s a misunderstanding of how the phrase works or getting it backwards) - simple mistake with a quick and easy fix once pointed out. ANd overall only small mistakes that are consistently made like that here and there. Only pointing this out because I genuinely believe anyone capable of writing such a wonderful story with such quality as this one deserves to have a lil help pointing something out here and there that they might have missed. I love this story, I hope you will too. Thanks for the hard work author, hope I haven’t ticked you off pointing those small issues out, I bet you’re busy. Good luck!