I'd say so far that the overall plot is interesting. There are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but I like the characters so far. In terms of dialogue, the characters didn't really sound like you'd assume they'd sound, such as the driver asking about what Beacon's power was. Furthermore, grammar is a bit off, I'd check over the next chapter before publish.
Fantasy · Aten_Deitine
Tbh I feel like you should set up lore either in a prequel book or just explain it as exposition in this book
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I'd say so far that the overall plot is interesting. There are a few spelling mistakes here and there, but I like the characters so far. In terms of dialogue, the characters didn't really sound like you'd assume they'd sound, such as the driver asking about what Beacon's power was. Furthermore, grammar is a bit off, I'd check over the next chapter before publish.
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Fantasy · Aten_Deitine