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If that's a filler for you, then good for us tbh

Moreover I don't really think he has created an ability though ? He just seems extremely talented in manipulating and fine tuning spells based on his will/intent, which you could turn into some sort of specialty for him only

For a first ff you are doing really really well, you seem to have a somewhat original world fleshed out, created differents sides, jobs and purpose for each talent, well done ! Now for the ability part, it bothers me a little since abilities are inherent to a person or a family, it doesn't make sense for him to "sell" it, nor for them to want it since you don't buy a talent, youare born with it, same as the Blacks and their metamorphmagus, I would like for it to stay an exclusivity to the MC, I don't really have an issue in you selling it but please make it impossible for 99.9% to learn for some reason. Moreover you exlained that Abilities are deritaive of generation of mages using or being strong in a field or a type a magic, so much that it translates into an ability, so there is 0 way other people can learn it. Nobody other than the Blacks were ever metamorphmagus

My man I love your work, did for years and still do, but for real it's been like 20 chapters of only 1 gym fight, it's wayyy too long for this, even 10 was already pushing it but it'll probably be 30 before it's done ... It gives the impression that the story doesn't go forward at all, at your rate of 4 chapters per week I can't handle 2 months of 1 Gym, it's an absolute nightmare ... Stilllove your story but please make sure the fights gets shortened or entirely skip them if you plan to spend as many chapters for every gym circuit

Well that is one mighty filler good Lord !

Hmm, well so far we already saw them ... No Uchiha Massacre, at least not for now, Danzo seemingly banished, Root expelled from Konoha, not a single one these happened in canon ... if you still think that way well you should stop reading because at this pace it will reach canon in a year at least, since there is still a whole war going on. Moreover Takuma won't necessarily be mingling with the clan Heirs either, he'll be older than them while not strong enough to be their sensei ! From the story so far I don't see him interacting with the kids at all for at least 2 years tbh, which isn't bad since the whole trope of the story is the POV of a middling-strong with 0 cheat and no bloodline character.

Yeah, D-ranks are mostly miscellaneous missions inside the village to introduce young ninjas to civilians, and only from C-rank and higher do you go outside the village, C-rank usually means risks of bandits level enemies, B-rank for genins-chunins I think and A-rank for Jonins etc

I was just thinking about this tbh, you can't go around stealing the nest of mutliples colonies of pokemons, it will force them to venture out and into conflict with other colonies and so on, it'll snowball. Though he only went against seemingly weak colonies, with the strongest pokemons being level 50~60, they all know it was a human, and that there is a human colony pretty close, so it's obvious who is gonna be the target of their retaliation. He had it comming !

It's missing the value of the bounty, for S-rank it's around 50 mil to 100 mil depending on their levels and strategic worth. Though almost no one goes bounty hunting S-rank except for Kakuzu you could use the bounty to sort of rank in strength the characters you introduce.

The author sometime ago infered that the Emperor didn't make that many day to day things, they are mainly here to steer the ship in the right direction and when big decisions are required, they aren't running every single thing 24/7. I would love for him to be though

I don't understand Sasuke fright with Shinobu ? Did Giyu mess up the drawing because he seems to think her ugly ? She looked pretty up on the scale of beauty in KNY

Yeah, this is weird, the Iphone 1 was Steve Jobs masterpiece, and it went from a collab to something that makes it look like it was 100% KiShin, no mention of the GOAT, announced by Shinro when it was Apple who did the groundwork, up in Japan first, really weird.

Meet the Emperor ? You overestimate Rui's value tbh, for most people he is a extremely strong warrior, though still in the middle realms of the power scale, I see no reason for an Emperor of a Sage nation to meet with a less than 30 y.o for unknown reasons ... except if the Emperor somehow takes the lead there is no way Rui would get his request accorded should he ask

Well I don't really want to read the same powers as another fanfic tbh, and some of the powers you mentioned are absolutely busted, Space/Time/Chaos are weird shit to include in fanfics since they tend to make their users completely break the power scale. The few such fruits in canon are Toki's Time fruit (not really sure if it is comfirmed) with which she couldn't manipulate time and those with space powers focus on Splitting (baggy) or teleporting which is already busted as it is. In Chinese mythology the White Tiger was reprensenting Metal Element if I remember well ?

For the White Tiger DF you could get him to materialize Killing Intent or make it an extension of his Conqueror's Haki ! Now though he should be getting it really soon, since we saw that Mythical Zoans are nightmare to awaken with both Marco/Kaido still not able to when they got their fruits for decades. Plus if he gets it in his early teens he can grow with it. Plus I think it goes perfect with his personnality/style.

Alright so should our dear MC get a DF, now that's a hard question ! There are pros and cons to both. For now and as far as cannon goes Mythycal Zoans are the absolute best DF, they grant you an enormous boost to regeneration/stamina/raw strength while adding an extraordinary aspect to it depending of the type of creature, like Marco/Kaido, a perk Ancient Zoans don't have. We saw so far that Logias get less OP the further you go into the strength ranks. Except maybe Kizarus fruit and good ol' E=m.c2 will keep up with the big bosses. Moreover the 5 Elders all got Mythical Zoans for a reason, same as Luffy. If he can get one, a mythical Zoan, I think he should, but it should be a brutal one, one which goes in pair with his fighting style which is speed and offence. Sofar there is a pretty original Mythical that we haven't seen, well 2 that I can think of that could be awesome. 2 of the 4 Holy Beasts, Azure Dragon, Kaido got it, Phoenix, Marco got it, which leave us with the Black Tortoise (would love for it to be Vergo's mythical considering his pure strength and black haki fighting style) and my personal absolute favourite White Tiger. In mythology it was an absolute brutal beast, really bloodthirsty and emphasizing on sharpness and speed which is a perfect fit for our MC !

Niiiicee. I love the fact the not all Weasleys seems aware of the plot. Arthur is such a good guy it would be impossible, don't remember if you mentioned the twins being part of the plot against Harry ?

Skip it, low level ninjutsus are for weak genins. With his growth he will outgrow them in a year and switch to the big guns, so don't bother ramping up theory right now. I mean almost every S-class ninja fights with a very limited battle style except Hiruzen since he is a jack of all trade/almost master of all. The other just push a few ones to their extremes or build up on them like Minato with Hiraishin/Rasengan, Nidaime with Water Release/Primitive Hiraishin/Shodaime with Wood release. The only things he will keep from his early days is the support Justus like substitution/Body Flicker and Taijutsu/Kenjutsu

My pleasure, though do be careful about his strenght level. For now he is seems to be getting stronger really fast, though still not really compared to adults but beware of making him extremely strong and then having to pop antagonists at his level for future fights when he is supposed to be a once in a lifetime genius !