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u shouldnt overdo the 4th wall breaking stuff like hes constantly talking to readers, it breaks the immersion and feel like a parody then an actual story

i like the idea of making him 1st but u should write it in a way that make better sense bcs even excluding those with guns from the way i see a strong person with some kind of weapon like knife steel bars etc should be able to kill 1 goblin no ? and the time it took him to run and finally kill 1 is kind of long to still be 1st

so its his future self huh

i only realized this now but why didnt he leave the dungeon by going upward to the 1st floor and go outside ? i hope this is not a plothole and will be answered in the future

not trying to be picky here but with all the advanced techs i dont think we would be using physical money in the future xD

wow,just wow,this is by far a chapter that is leagues above other chaps i read from all the webnovel on this site,somehow i can feel the vibe of the anime re:zero,the tension,the mystery,the horror,this scene is a perfect animated material imo

lol until i saw the author reply u i thougth the same thing,author u should really rewrite a few sentences to make it doesnt sound like he got shot and transmigrated like that

good 1st chapter, i was looking through apocalypse tags for so long to find st good and ultimately gave up but sh i found urs on new arrivals even though its not new at all lol i mean it has near 300 chaps, guess its not being promoted that much huh

is this arxa the same 1 as in ascension online ?

now that i reread i noticed mc never got esmi to say her sercret to him at the date at all ?

lol there is 1 thing the author prob forgot but is the easiest solution to all of his mistake : he can kill himself again and again to turn back time and fix it everytime he did something wrong, this is a very big loophole

there are so many bad things in 1st few chap...1st is how he just rush to a quest way over his lvl with no plan instead of lvling a bit to make it easier...2nd u make him meet the girl way too soon it feels forced...3rd he just got way too lucky like kill a monster in the dungeon get 1 of best skill and that skill is the only way he could do the quest if he didnt get it idk how he couldve killed the necromancer...and some more about pacing grammar dmg scaling but thats just the major point,pls dont make the mc god of luck in just 5 chapters

i think u make a mistake here, 1 of the previous chap said that he only got 10 inventory slots but now he got 500, either its a mistake or u forgot to mention he increased his slots somehow

hey man,i was wondering when i found ur story by chance,it was really good comparing to dozens of top novel i read on webnovel but why u have so few reader count ? maybe u should try promoting the novel somehow and increasing the release rate to attract more reader cause i feel like ur novel got the potential to reach the top

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