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Buen comienzo, sin muchos errores hasta ahora, espero más capítulos que sean igual de entretenidos..........................🗣🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

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It would be the case if the actual events of your story could be called plot, because the "plot" is that the X-Men come to a fight of the protagonist with an NPC in a totally random way, CASUALLY among these was the person that justly needed the protagonist, ie, basically a random plot armor did the job to the protagonist because literally the guy did nothing, the author will probably say "🤓☝🏻 in fact everything that happened was just what he had planned" but the narrative logic behind it all is a mess of random events that end up starting the "plot" (which you take quite a while to get to by the way). As for the main character, he's like I said, an edgy guy with no personality who thinks with his gun first before his head (not in the sexual sense), add to that the guy doesn't even have enough strength to back up his actions and you have a dysfunctional guy in every aspect who tries to be badass, basically CRINGE (the last thing you expect when you have DANTE in the title). As for updates, there's one chapter that was uploaded three days after the previous one, most two, there's a reason I say "between 2 and 3 days". Except for the last one which can be a problem depending on the reader's patience, I only talked about the problems that the author counter-argued from my review giving the relatively deep analysis of everything, which in principle I didn't plan to do because the truth is you don't have to explain much why a story is mid when it's pretty obvious, and when I wrote this the story had few chapters, so there was a lot of room for improvement and I didn't plan to demoralize the creator. But it has a pretty weak narrative, the fights are bland, it has several clichés (most recently "Cyclops = bad and MC = good") and overall it's a story worthy of the two stars aspiring to 3 if only the update periods were common. If you're wondering "is it readable?". Well yes, it's mostly understandable and not on the level of a Chinese fanfic, but it's far from good and I personally don't recommend it.

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