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Wow, I was really mean; I don't know if you'll ever read this, but I'm sorry for that, I hope you did not take it to heart, it's ok to make mistakes, the important thing is to always strive to be better; again, I'm really sorry

Ok, you are ok, but not so much, first thing: W-A-K-I-N-G!!!!! not wakeing! Second thing: as long as you do short chapters, do not change POW, third thing you try to explaun things in detail but end up repeating yourself to no end, you use "this" and other pronouns too much

wow, this story is coming along really nicely, I was pleasanty surprised when i started reading it, beacouse this story truly was outside my expectations, it's refreshing. you should just pay attention since you made some errors, sometimes you write "he" and not "she", and sometimes you use present simple when you should use other tenses, still this story is good and most importantly different, it's refreshing when compared to the same old webnovels I usually read. also do you have an upload schedule? I'm corius how much time I'll generally have to wait between chapters

ok, this story is good, but PLEASE stop repeating the same lines!!!! "silver lining" "almost too much.... almost" and others, i'm getting sick of it, the story is good but it's getting frustrating!

Gasoline? Really? Not oil? Gasoline is pretty modern, it doesn't make any sense, the system would pobably make it pay something like 1000 dp per liter, unlsess it's a very inconsistent system, and why the 3rd floor isn't in fire or something?

Ok, he is a spectator......again, how did he manage to make traps? How did he manage to show the goblins?

Wait, how di he made traps, when did he buy a body? If he has bought one, then why he can spawn monsters? He should lack the Dp.

Ok, missed a thing in the review, it's not that you don't use apostrophes, you use them, but sometimes you do not, and it's easy to misunderstand when we'll become well.

This is a good story, the main 2 problems are that you keep misplacing commas and you don't use apostrophes, beacouse of this 2 errors the story is way less enjoyable than it should be

I love this story, i'm waiting for the new chapter and I hope you get better

Author, there is this little thing, it looks like this(,), and it's used to give sense to a sentence and to prevent the reader from passing out due to lack of air, so please, use it.

why it's machine translated?! The strory seems good, but i can't read it! I literally got a headache after 5 minutes, and after 10 i couldn't understand anything beacouse all pronouns are "I" and i simply couldn't understand who was talking. Like i said, it seems a good story, but the translation is the trash of the trash.