I feel as though you don’t really know the concept of ‘show don’t tell’. You’re not providing any imagery for what’s happening. The beginning is cliche and generic and there is no clear scene painted in front of me. What you are trying to say isn’t being portrayed the way you want it to and this is just me being honest. I think this story has potential, so I’ll keep going.
ch 0 1 Jump into the Sea
Urban · Warm Color Su
Pornographic Content Hate or bullying Release of personal info Violence Spam Other
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I feel as though you don’t really know the concept of ‘show don’t tell’. You’re not providing any imagery for what’s happening. The beginning is cliche and generic and there is no clear scene painted in front of me. What you are trying to say isn’t being portrayed the way you want it to and this is just me being honest. I think this story has potential, so I’ll keep going.
ch 0 1 Jump into the Sea
Reincarnation Of The Businesswoman At School
Urban · Warm Color Su