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for some reason this part in the story sounds pretty similar to a part in another story.
The blue light from the system screen reflected on his face as he smiled, revealing two big incisor teeth touching his bottom lip. Drops of sweat rolled down his cheek.
Necromancer of the End Times
Fantasy · nekrom1
See this! I just gifted the story: Inspiration capsule
ch 373 Reach
My Necromancer Class
Fantasy · Aero182
Has anyone seen anything else by this author?
ch 373 Reach
My Necromancer Class
Fantasy · Aero182
you keep using he and him for her please check spelling.
ch 0 8 CP : 8 - Weekend
I reincarnated as a Dungeon Master in another world
Fantasy · _theFool
instead of saying to take a rest just say to rest.
Time continued to pass, and soon night arrived. The driver stopped the van in a good area to spend the night and take some rest after what happened earlier.
Necromancer Of The Shadows
Fantasy · Zero_writer
🤣 I love it
Lux Von Kaizer's Weakness - Donald Tramp
Strongest Necromancer Of Heaven's Gate
Fantasy · Elyon
what happened to Maria going to the cathedral?
ch 319 319. Out in The Rain
Master of none
Fantasy · 1King_Rep1
instead of retrieved would flow better with stored
In a matter of seconds, they were at the entrance of the forest and Ray retrieved silver back into the system and carried his blood spear, and entered back into the village. He didn't want the villagers to see silver and think he's a beast.
Beast Evolution
Fantasy · Mhizta_Ray
who are they? should be the wording
The first thing Ray saw was the silver shining armor that a certain person wore along with other in the group, "it's them" Arya marveled at the sight of these people, "who are these?" Ray asked.
Beast Evolution
Fantasy · Mhizta_Ray
instead of kept should use put for example I put the item on the floor or I put it in my pocket. it would help flow.
The others also looked at their card and kept them in their pockets, "what should we do now?" Ray asked the group, "what else, complete as many tasks as we can and get some money or possibly raise our rank" Jack replied to him.
Beast Evolution
Fantasy · Mhizta_Ray
I would use "could not" instead of "couldn't not" it sounds a little off. just some advice good story line though so far keep it up.
"What! this humanoid dogs are really getting on my nerves, how dare they call me it", the kobold couldn't not understand what he was saying so they raised their weapons and swung it aiming for his head.
Beast Evolution
Fantasy · Mhizta_Ray
I like the story line and the characters. It's a great twist to the norm please keep this going.
ch 48 The Blacksmith's Daughter
My Undeath
Fantasy · Jhaydun
her
Wang Ran reprimanded him.
The World Is Ending And I Am Surrounded By Female Zombies
Fantasy · Depressed Barbecued Pork
not sure what sticking the tongue out would mean in this sentence.
Lin Momo stuck out her tongue and felt a little guilty.
The World Is Ending And I Am Surrounded By Female Zombies
Fantasy · Depressed Barbecued Pork
not sure you have to say Wang Ran everytime you use his name Wang would be good enough thanks just trying to give some feedback.
Wang Ran held a pan in his left hand and a hammer in his right as he slowly walked downstairs.
The World Is Ending And I Am Surrounded By Female Zombies
Fantasy · Depressed Barbecued Pork
why not use their faction chat like Colin did earlier in the story to gather all members before the beast tide?
Jayce flicked through the messages, his eyes turning dull. 'That baldy is such a clingy bastard.' he remarked inwardly. To be fair, he probably should have messaged Dion as soon as he could, however there were more pressing matters at the time.
Chef in the Apocalypse
Fantasy · leeroycgna