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I don't feel like writing a long review but i see a lack of reviews and do not want to see the author not motivated to continue. Do read the story as i do recomend to give it a try. My review wil probably seem rather negative but it is simply because i am writing things i feel that the author could improve upon. The story itself is good, chapters are long. writing: Very little to point out. Some very minor mistakes here and there which mostly just fast writing mistakes. (random example not in the story: continioys.) I do not remember which words but the author probably pressed the wrong letter on accident and did not find out. I have only seen one or two of them. updates; I dont know, wish more but is somewhat consistent probably? Story: It is moving along, wish to see more on how blacksmithing is done. I also personally hope that there wont be any guns and cannons at some point but i wil find out. Character; they seem alive but yet somehow feel simple. The characters lack a certain depth to them. Battle fanatic only thinks of battle. Researcher only thinks of researching. They are somewhat predictable and simplistic in their thoughts. World; The world is big and all and places are rather well described. The only thing i find lacking is that places arent described enough. What does the town lay-out look like? How does the square and surrounding buildings look like? Only some places are well described in more details but i feel like a lot is just glossed over. Stil i read everything so far (offline and had not used the acc) and i wil continue to read either as soon as a chapter drops or when there are more chapters.

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Read up to pay for view chapters and dont want to download the app. So the review is up to chapter 44 and the score is based on a novel that wants to earn money. (Its a harsher score then some first time novel writers or fanfics.) Writing 4: No glaring mistakes found here. No big grammar mistakes and the sentences flow. It is written as a very light read. Stability 3: i checked and it isn't very stable. It is released around every 2 to 4 days but you wil be left uncertain exactly how many days there is between each chapter. Story 2: Very old man reincarnates and becomes OP. That is basicly the story. Where i got at chapter 44 you learn a little more and a big plot or arc seems to be coming but for the first 44 chapters there is none. Character 2: The mc is either mentally handicapped or the author has failed in his mission to write about someone who is 80+. The mc sounds more like a 15 to 20 years old who got reincarnated but if he was then all his previous life skill would make no sense. As such i believe the author wrote him as old. The parents are very accepting of everything around the mc to a fault. Furthermore the 3 females introduced are like most harem novels, just plain dumb when it involves the mc. Background 4: Actually enjoy the background and the abilities sounds nice. I do recommend to give it a try if you like a read where it doesnt go in depth. It's good for your casual i dont want to think and just read moments.

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I have only read 10 chapters so my score is more lenient then usual. Writing: It is readable but you can tell he used MTL and admits it, so some spelling and grammar mistakes are present but not too much. Stability; I just gave it a 5... i dont know if its stable or not. Story; The author has made the urban fantasy novel/movies of harry potter into a High fantasy novel. The mc is able to do things he shouldn't be able to do even in a urban fantasy standard. (creating magic without blowing up things or dying, being good at everything etc.) But the ideas the mc has and the pacing outside of his learning is good and i dont know how it wil develop so i gave it a 4. Character: I would give it a 1 if i had read more then what i did and if nothing changed. So far the mc has no personality to speak of. Hes very bland as a person and i can hardly feel any connection to the mc. (I dont feel like the characters are alive) Also the mc should be named Gary and not Ethan... even for a fanfiction there should be a limit to how godly a mc should be. Background: While the world around the mc is not very much described (i stil dont know the lay-out of his house, yard or anything) It stil is a harry potter world. So in conclusion, some wil love the OP mc and the story and others wil hate it. As for me? I could not get into the story. The story is too high fantasy in an urban fantasy setting for me. (MC being able to create spells and fight trained teens or maybe beat adults etc,.. but mostly creating spells. Luna her mother died because of it and she was a genius at it but the mc here? his half baked fanfic and canon knowledge lets him create spells without truly understanding magic? And not mention of any accident happening during his testing? It is too much even for a fanfic in my opinion... yours might be different)

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Agreed fully, especially know what happend to Luna her mother. She was a genius at spells but died due to experimenting with it.

What about my spell creation? I was able to create many spells that use elements, as elements were the most basic type of magic, as the intention we have when casting an elemental ice or fire spell is that we simply want to use our magic to produce the ice and freeze or create fire and heat something, and after some practice we can even mold them to our will.

Savage: The Night Wizard - (A Harry Potter Fanfic)

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Overall score is a 4 i suppose. The writing quality is quite bad at the start but gets better later on. You can tell the author is improving his english as he writes. Updates are stable enough... probably... havent looked at it nor cared. Story: I am liking and hating it at the same time. The mc is close to a gary stu atm and it is what is starting to make me want to drop this novel. Im at chapter 148 now and small spoiler but the mc has only lost once but was never in actual danger... or atleast dindt feel like it. (he even won against his latest opponent at 146-148 who he should not have beaten) As such trying to not be biased against a troupe i very much hate (gary stu mcs) I wil give this a 4 as everything else is good. The story is flowing nicely altho a bit fast with how strong they get. Character: like what i said in story the mc is a gary. The rest of the crew feels like a mix of straw hats and oc. The crews personalities is heavily influenced by straw hats. I would have liked to see a more original dynamic of the crew but i suppose it is fine as is but because of all the mentioned above the score is a 3. Background... well its one piece and the world and everything surrounding it just sounds fascinating. (This review got a bit of my biased in it but not too much) So overall a good story, the start is a bit bad because grammar. The grammar improves but the story starts lacking as time goes on. (You can probably tell whats going to happen in the mini arcs in one or two chapters)

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Thank you for the trouble.

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