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I think Arcana grew the most as a character, feats of power are never impressive the first time around. Conversation and interaction makes a character loveable or memorable.

No! If the kid was his maybe I could see her caring about going with him but this is out of character for her. She wouldn’t leave that planet without her child unless Gwen is just a bad mother.

When a powerful artifact forces you to take your ex crush with you on an easily compile table mission to complicate your life.

I liked everything except the mention of his past love. He should not remember her or the feelings. Morgan’ should have gotten her moment. Why rob her of it, you know when he merges with his old body he would then Remember and feel even worse. I do not think he would have acted in that manner he isn’t his old self right now. Maybe you just don’t like Emery being a womanizer or something. Just seems like the wrong action at the time

This chapter was good. The transitions were on point and helped show that everyone is doing all they can to become more than they are. All fighting against one goal which is to be better than they are. I think it wouldn’t work as well if it wasn’t for the group goals of improvement behind it.

Why? It’s going to make him stronger. If all he has to do is eat something nasty to get strong he should be happy.

This chapter was fantastic. Doevm taking control and leading while fixing his broken friends. For a character who works mostly off logic I am just surprised it took him this long to start telling the others how to better themselves. Maybe he realized they won’t help better themselves without direction.

What are you attempt to achieve with your writing style? We could help you more if we knew what you wanted to accomplish. Give suggestions to help you get to your goal. I think this novel was much more interesting in the beginning. Where D dealt with his mental trauma often giving depth to his non human behavior. Now we are walking the same shuff for the should be hero’s grandkid as the arc is more about his background. The elf dwarf and undead rose boy are way more true characters where doevm and Frey are seeming kinda like extras with issues. I used to ask why you killed everyone off so quickly, but it kind of drove the story and gave reason for the team to continue. I think I understand now.

I’d like it more if there was more to read. 1 chapter a month is a little slow.

Why do you ask who do you think will die next chapter? I find that the characters aren’t as loved when they are brought or made just to die. Much like the walking dead, extras die often. Named characters you have to like, to care if they go. When named characters die so often it kinda lessens the effect.

This is all a setup so that he can break his promise. We all know he will have to go back to the snake bloodline to enhance himself to his next wolf version. What he won’ like when he gets there will be fighting his already enhanced clone. Which she may or may not be with when he goes back.

He will go and help take down some unkillable thing that regenerates. Like the class 5. He will be brought in to drain the beast/primordial helping him get the Devour pillar setup. His seniors also know his affiliation with the wisps on his planet so may want his opinions but he accidentally absorbs it in the process of checking it out. It’s never something simple.

I think he should go fight the battle academy’s combat dummy to get a claw skill. It’s his worst weakness right now.

You got it

I don’ think bob the frog will mess up. Think emery will leave some out which will end up messing up everythin

He was testing his new brother is worthy.

Emery had someone give up thier life for him, so he could do so. He also has the power of Chaos which he was sucking up like a sponge. The rest of the team doesn’t have his ‘gift’ for cultivating on Earth. It’s why they catch up so quickly in the academy every time they go back.