charan_1129

10mth

Commented

thanks bro, waited for a long time for the chapter🥲

ch 104 Secret Wars III

Legend of the Sword Immortal

Eastern · IDreamNovels

charan_1129

1yr

Commented

bro this para as well 2nd sentence is not needed at all this makes the whole para not interested to read .please do not add the additional sentences or words with the similar meaning repeatedly.

Jono, however, was not the type to wear his emotions on his sleeve. His reserved nature and taciturn demeanor barely allowed him to muster a slight smile in response to Danank's greeting. Nevertheless, he was curious about the occasion that had brought them together and couldn't help but ask about it. "Is there anything special about this event? Why did you invite me instead of your school friends?" Jono inquired, his voice laced with a hint of intrigue.

Fourth Sky: Puppeteer

Fantasy · Keongmas

charan_1129

1yr

Commented

Bro, i really enjoy the novel. so, please don't take it as an offence. It is my personal opinion but you are explaining the setting or situations too deeply like this paragraph first 2 lines and in many other paragraphs and chapters .It doesn't feel to good to read if these kinds of sentences are frequently added.

As the night sky enveloped the city, painting a rich tapestry of gray and black, Danank reached out to Jono. The message was succinct: they must meet at the festival location at precisely eight o'clock that evening. Danank was known for his meticulousness and his unwavering adherence to punctuality, so Jono was well aware of the importance of arriving on time. He had already instructed Alvi to join them at the designated location, with a stern warning to arrive promptly.