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3yr
Commented The chapter is rather short but i guess it is the prolog? It should be fine if the next one ist longer
ch 0 1 The World We Know
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Urban · LordRayleigh
3yr
Commented probably the prota, no?
And in this new era, an individual would soon arise and become the greatest threat to all of humanity.
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3yr
Commented ahhhh Heracles because he burned himself
Heracles is the person who accomplished peace through sheer force. After that Heracles burned himself in front of the Kings and announced a new era of cruelty, hatred and despair for humanity.
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Urban · LordRayleigh
So, first chapter first review i guess. I really like your idea and the whole concept, but your cahpter is way too short. I think there were no mistakes, but i would write some things diffrent in order tom make them more interesting.
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