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If a question like this can be answered, how many chapters are left before we already have contact with the Avengers?

For ideas, I think you should already start the plot of Avengers 2012 and maybe incorporate the Xmen in that part, since you already introduced them to the fanfic, it makes no sense to forget them.

What I say at the beginning is that before the character felt more real, now he seems like a child with emotional problems where he doesn't know what to do, for example where a person (colosso) wants to enter his kingdom to take and guide the mutants that have, and the next chapter he's thinking if he should have let him in, he doesn't feel like a king, much less like a part of Gilgamesh.

How strange it feels, before the story felt very interesting, a Gilgamesh who didn't mind going to the Avengers once and for all, now it's more of a Wakanda version of Uruk, let's not leave, let's not even let them know about the kingdom and let them come to us, The story lacks something interesting, I feel it on my part as a prototypical Isekai of managing a kingdom.

Most people will think of a large harem, but a maximum of 2-3 is better. The time to create something coherent and not forced is too much, creating a large harem will only make the story the same as the others in my opinion.

Enough of these notes, I get excited thinking it's a chapter.😔

The story is going perfect, perhaps we need to acquire a little of Gilgamesh's own arrogance, but when he is more adapted the character would be fine, the only way to ruin this story in my opinion is to include things about fate that are not Gilgamesh, then That's it, it's perfect.

Thank you very much for response, as a former writer I understand how difficult it is to start a story, I don't know if it is your first story but I recommend personally writing the ending, so you can guide yourself to the goal, I am glad to see a comment below which does not cover the fate line since it would be a bit meh in my opinion, I hope to continue seeing how this story develops and good luck with it.

For me the writing is completely fine, what I would change would be if they were longer because in my opinion it is taking a long time to get out of Uruk, let's say that if the story is going to be long, the world of Marvel alone UCM covers a lot, so Taking 12 chapters just for the introduction seems like a lot to me, I still hope the story goes long because it looks very interesting. 😃