20DrachenAuge - Profile

Okay! I'm gonna read until the last and see for it myself! Haha ::)

Ly really is amazing, not losing rationality in her mind and what not! So, are you! Your writing is really good, but you can adjust those paragraph like splitting them into 2 or more? That would make it reading more engaging! Your narration is surreal, and you might just tone it down a little bit, and let the characters explain it themselves! Yeah! Keep writing! ::)

That was engaging! Felt like it ended too quickly, haha... But yeah, I found a little awkwardness in your writing style, which improved may prove you best! And why the 5 stars? Becoz I know you would improve your style! Keep Writing!

It's beautifully written! (Excluding some grammatic errors here and there). I'm cheering for both You and Emma! Jason is such a sweet heart. And yeah, the chapters can be longer. You are making a break where the mood actually develops, it makes it feel really short. So work on that!! Good Luck!