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Simple clone jutsu is taught in academy not shadow clones.

Aegis of fairy tail

Very well. . Looking forward to the new chapter .. 🍺

Don't make the new Mizukage appease Suna.. They don't have any S class shinobi to really pose a danger to the mist village.. Suna is also the weakest village. So For, him to go out of his way to make peace with them would only show, others his weakness.. Don't make him the new Sarutobi Hiruzen... He should focus on his own village.. the civil War didn't even start so mist is in really strong position.. Have mist be neutral towards other village for the time being.. And remember this is Yuki's Story not Naruto's.. So Don't create useless plotlines to fit Naruto in his life..

Can you change the original story and add new theme and setting. Where the mc will research more on magic like Merlin , and have great knowledge and wisdom.. .Wnd where he can prevent his mother's death . . Make Meliodas does not fall in love with Elizabeth, and does not betrAy his kind.. . After 1000 of years he will leave the demon land for new adventure and form the seven deadly sins.. The Demon Clan and the Goddesses would seperate their region into different dimension. .And remain neutral..

Can you write a story, where the mc is very powerful and competent .. Like Gojo from jujutsu. Make the mc, the strongest in the world. And he does not involve with the original mc of the story, remains indifferent to the original story but use it for its advantage..

Have you seen Aegis of Fairy Tail, it is a fanfic, where mc can use barrier make, he later becomes an S rank wizards and later the ace of fairy tail and a Wizard Saint. . It is a great story, it will help you in this story, in developing his character and skills. Looking forward to this story...

The best fanfic of Black Clover.. Great ending, simple and great. While his journey across multiverse would have been nice, this ending suits this story better... Looking forward to your next work .

With his space power he can replicate Gojo too.. Gradually make him op . And give him his own life, that he will help others if he sees someone in need but would nit go out of his way... Make him be more tune with his character you wrote ,cool and mostly indifferent to anyone else.. And make him rule all the oceans in the world..

Is this Naruto story or cultivation story?? And Kakashi of this story is a joke even more so than cannon.. He knows the danger coming with Akatsuki and Uchiha Madara. . Then there are the Okutsuki clan ,and you are showing that even after knowing this he still struggles with Jugo.. And seriously what did you do with the flying thunder God, he can only mark with mangekyu sharingan, it is one of the most stupid thing in any fanfic I have read.. In the 4 shinobi war, it is shown that both Tobirama Senju and Minato Namikaze can put the shinki (formula) of Hirashin with one touch but you made it excessively complicated for no reason whatsover.. At his age All the Kage and both Sasuke and Naruto were S rank or even more powerful and he is pathetic.. And when you sealed the chakra of sharingan how can he go blind in one eye, what type of logic did you use?? He was jonin at what 12 or 13 ? With sage mode and flying thunder God he should be high s rank now.. And one more thing what is this Milineum sword? You did not even give the white chakra of the Hatake clan. At the age of 21 he should be atleast kage level or on the level of Hashirama Senju.

Yo man, will you ever upgrade it.. When you added Kuroko on the 1 year Team, the story started to suck.. You are writing this story with the ideas of the shoe... He is called the king, but you made him a loser.. Really ,in the show it is all about Kuroko's idea of Basketball. then Daiki boredom and lack of love and all that. Any game or career you choose is about victory and being the best and the mc, with his wishes and cannon knowledge and all the resources available always losses, I mean common man.. And you made him a lousy captain.. with his abilities he could help all the players with their styles and help improve teamwork tremendously but he is not doing anything at all.. You should really stop focusing on the Teiko Team, they are not the main character, they are the side character, you put too much emphasis on them. There is no need to go philosophical in the story, he loves to play and wants to win.. This story had great potential but it sucks. .even now it could be great, have him improve greatly and win against Teiko. .Then at the start of High school have him selected for Japan U19 and go from there.. Really focus on the mc and his progress and not on others . . And don't sent him to Seirin high but sent him to other team, maybe with other uncrowned king or one member of generation of miracles.. so that he can rely on his teammates too..