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Ah okay thanks 👍

How often does the author update? And is the story on an impromptu hiatus? Just to know if I should save this for some time in the future if it is on hiatus 👍😁

I agree, 100000 pushups doesn't seem realistic. I mean the world record for most pushups in an hour is around 3000, so to do 100000 pushups my guy would need like a bit more than 1.33 days. In one punch man saitama only did 100 pushups I believe and he became superstrong. So I would maybe change this to 1000 pushups for daily training

So which variant gyarados is jinbe?

But like what variant

What pokemon is jinbe again?

What is his electric pokemon I assume its a pikachu or raichu. Do his parents know about it and what happened to the feebas. Also do his parents know about the remoraid and the water 6?

Is the mc 8 years old? I thought he was 4 turning 5

What about combee pokemon, don't they match up better for honey city?

So there is a 2 year dufference between them (72 months) or 6 earth years?

How old was he again, I already thought that he was 4 turning 5, and how old is rose.. 6?

Thanks for the chapter. What I noticed in this chapter early on, you used the simple present tense like says, looks, talks, tells etc. Instead of the simple past tense sayed, looked, talked, told etc. This is nothing major and you're writing rarely has grammatical errors. This was just something that I took note of, and it might disrupt the flow and building up of the battle scene. Thanks again for the chapter, and once again its nothing major, it could have been that you overlooked this.

The info is there but some of it feels redundant like the steps for awakeni g aura and psychic powers are basically the same and you could just mention the key differences to make it a bit shorter while keepi g the essence of what you want to say. Additionally as an improvement, I would try improving the dialogue between the mother and father as it appears awkward and blocky, disrupting the flow. I would try make the characters a bit more expressive because the intention is there but the emotion is maybe a bit lacking. These are things to take note of, but they aren't obligatory and you can decide whether or not to use these recommendations. Thanks again for the chapter and this fanfic seems to be one of the better ones so good luck and I'll keep on reading 👍😁

I'm really liking the premise of the novel so far, it has a very stable foundation. And very reasonable explanations to the abilities he gets. Pretty well written as well, and the information is well spread without it seeming messy. Thanks for the chapter 😁

Like where is this world from like which book?

Thanks, what was the original book called btw?

I thought it was an android?

Thanks for the chapter 👍

Thanks a lot. You're one of the most interactive authors I've met