Webnovel Author: TacetIrae - Fanfic Collection

at this point , every superhero and villian had some character development ,but mc. just delete him from position of mc and make him another overpowered nobody that sometimes shows up to give riddles to actual characters of the book and thats it. But for real, arcs with supposed to be a mc are one chapter long , arcs without him ever appear is 3-5 chapters long. ..

why the language is so awkward? is it a translation?

it would be logical if villagers were the same as in the game, like silent guys with big noses that only hum and do some jobs that they are assigned. here they are fully human like and takes mc for the god presumably will never betray his as well. while dothrski are guys that kill each other for fun. and they hate magic, so why by this point in time he is not challenged by every fifth of his horde is a question and the fact that he was unmounted from his horse is like a death to a dotraki. their culture has this specific topic about being about to stay in the saddle and if not ,said one to be abandoned, killed or whatever, but definitely not being esteemed leader that everyone fearsfears. it's just doesn't make sense since any experienced fighter can tell as much as he is a noob at fight and while also WEARING armour he is fight foes while being a dotraki, that DON'T wear armor since it is an indication of being a little girl and weak.

I rly fail to see his motivation to keep those savegaes near him he has unlimited amount of loyal man that won't run to ur enemy as soon as ure deafed, yet he still keeps them near, while all they can do is pillage and fight, which is the least important things when it comes to creating ur own kingdpm..

very inconsistent. Child that is 15 years old, that should have behaviour that is fitting for strict and cold person, in a matter of minutes changes in a way that is not possible. if he never was loved , how could he understand what love is? so my conclusion is that u are writing about a guy who has some mental disease, since in RL it is not possible to change youtself in a matter of seconds

13 chapters yet we are still in the stage where story didn't start. synopsis talks about one thing here we have some useless development when a guy is part of the game and nothing more. well it's boring ,hopefully u move to the actual plot of fan fiction soon....

where is this anxiety comes from? why is he paranoid about his strength? it seems that the characters was bullied all of his life and can't accept that there is anyone absolutely anyone stronger than him. yet he had not faced a single threat. He always talks about making someone stronger , but doesnt want to take big steps in this direction , he sits on his butt doing research for himself by himself , instead he could become famous in field of science and create a team that will help him. but I guess his sick paranoia that makes him wish to be the absolute strongest can't allow to trust others. I also can't seem to find the reason he makes all this serum other than empower himself , yeah sister go ahead be vampire never have a chance of having a baby be a cold blood corpse without having control of your own desires. sorry but I just don't seem to find his care for anything other than himself. he talks about worries for family yet his actions don't really match that much, his main concern in only about himself. I have no idea what author wanted to show but this is what I see. so it is only my personal analysis of the character

yeah I didn't mention anything bout the story just the way character of a person is developed

that's a huge info dump