Youkelele - Profile

I am never a fan of stories with unfair system advantages owned by only the MC which he then uses it to overpower everything. But somehow, this story manage to strike the right balance. There were some overpowered moments, but the opponents isn't excessively filled with the usual cliche tropes usually found in traditional system/xanxia stories. As the story expands, the system is used less and less, which is a nice change. It was a pleasant surprise to find that as the story develops, the characters develops an independence from the system (or they try to and succeeded in a way). They try ways to develop technologies that builds on what the system provides as opposed to having the system spoon feed them everything. In my opinion this gives the story more depth and weight. My only critique is the writing quality. There are erroneous spelling errors, punctuations, and grammatical mistakes that sometimes ruin the reading experience. The sentence structure and prose could be better as some sentences requires multiple rereads to understand what it's trying to convey. Tenses are all over the place and sometimes character switches gender (lol), referred to he, then she, then back to he. The quality got somewhat better after he got an editor, but a lot of errors still persist throughout the later chapters. Don't let the writing quality push you away from the story though. The story is still better written and have decent foreshadows than 90% of the top stories here on this platform. It is truly a hidden gem on WN. Give it a go. It delivers on what it promises. Could use more kingdom building, but that's just me being a sucker for a good sci-fi kingdom building. Cheers!