Badges 4
Moments 40
Thanks for those wise words!
To die for someone, you only needed to find courage once. But to live for someone, you needed to have courage every day.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
a truth for all to learn....
Irene noticed that he wasn't excited about it. "Nature is all about balance. When balance is lost, destruction follows. You were torturing yourself too much in order to protect someone else. When you destroy yourself, you can protect no one. This is nature helping you find a balance. You can't punish yourself for not being able to protect your loved ones."
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
Grammar: the word "only" would be more effective if used once in either location of the sentence where it appears.
Heaven threw away her shield. Now they would only fight with their swords only. Brody became impulsive and started to attack viciously, only tiring himself. After a while Heaven had enough. Stepping away, she went behind him and elbowed him in the back of his neck.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
grammar: ".... when [they] saw Zamiel" punctuation: "Kate, on the other hand, was shocked when she saw Zamiel sitting next to her on the bed. Her eyes widened."
Callum and Oliver were ready to fight but looked confused when saw Zamiel. Kate on the other hand was shocked. When she saw Zamiel sitting next to her on the bed, her eyes widened.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
What?! Is this real or a dream?! Good shock value for the story!
She had to finish the task before he woke up, so she pulled the dagger back and stabbed him in the throat.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
Grammar! "sun rose"..."
They went back and slept for the rest of the night. As soon as the sun rised, they continued with their journey.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
Zarin is suffering from the repercussions (kick back) of being a slow learner!
"If you want to follow me as my guard, follow me like every other guard." She told him.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
"dry herself"
Slapping her cheeks diligently, Yuna felt that refreshed. It was as if her brain restarted just for a split second, and all the useless thoughts she had disappeared. There were supposed to be no malice in this as she only just wanted to use Min's clothes to dry himself.
Rise of the White Tiger Priestess
History · LeeMaRi1999
should be "baring its teeth..."
A gold plateau with a tiger's face was in the middle of the room. The tiger was bearing its teeth as if it was ready to fight every man who dared to lock gazes with it. Suddenly, Yuna could hear a commotion at the door.
Rise of the White Tiger Priestess
History · LeeMaRi1999
Why are you giving spoilers within the text? You are nullifying the suspense you have just built up for the reader and interrupted the flow of your story!
Ps. I am not quite sure if this is how a warning should be done.
Rise of the White Tiger Priestess
History · LeeMaRi1999
Thanks for the history lesson . More to love!
ch 170 Chapter 47
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
The 1st "Rin" should be "Yuna" for the context to make sense!
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Rise of the White Tiger Priestess
History · LeeMaRi1999
Who is Mina? It originally appeared that we were hearing the thoughts of Yuna!
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Rise of the White Tiger Priestess
History · LeeMaRi1999
I enjoyed seeing Heaven put her training to use. I'm relieved that Zamiel arrived in time to save Heaven. Your timing and pacing as a writer are wonderful.
Thank you so sooo much for your well wishes and for keeping me in your prayers. I am very grateful for your patience and the positive vibes you sent. I am feeling better now. If this chapter feels like a mess, let me know. Then my head is probably not in the right place yet.
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef
I truly enjoy the author's entertaining craft! There is so much irony in both the word play between the names of characters, their roles and their interactions. The devil is getting caught in his own web, unintentionally thwarted by the effects of his own selfish motives and devilish rash actions. He is thwarted by the purity of Heaven after trying to manipulate her for his selfish gains. Zamiel, a "demon", acts honorably and teaches wisely by example after being freed, accepted and inspired by Heaven. Zarin embodies common characteristics of many who grow up self-absorbed, accustomed to a pampered life. Their lack of diverse exposure to economic striving while growing up leads to latent maturity. He didn't value the immeasurable love and friendship surrounding him until it was lost. His highly selfsh demeanor seems to have prevented his ability to learn from the wisdom his father tried to teach him while growing up. Zarin finally begins to reflect on those lessons forced by now having to work to regain the ethereal virtues of life. His new mentors lead him to replace the emptiness of his former material pursuits with spiritual values which will sustain him no matter what his material surroundings may be. Heaven inspires everyone both symbolically and in their physical reality to move towards the greater good (even if inadvertently).
ch 270 Chapter 147
Married to the Devil's Son
Fantasy · JasmineJosef