RoarWritings

2yr

Replied to kuhaku_sora

Yeah after reading the rest I already guessed so.

Code had holographic set wrapped around the head like a helmet. It allowed the players to transfer their thoughts inside the world filled with magic and monsters. People could become villains or heroes inside the world, and nobody could stop them, not even the game developers.

NPC Code: Red Riding Hood

Fantasy · kuhaku_sora

RoarWritings

2yr

Posted

Starting felt like the generic start of the VR story but as I progressed the story was quite unique. The thing that I felt unusual was the game dev not having any control over their own game. It felt kinda unreal but it was need for the plot trigger so I guess its fine. Ngl the writing quality was quite good. It was emerging and easy to imagine. I liked the writing style. the only thing I felt lacking was the character design. Its my opinion tho.

NPC Code: Red Riding Hood

Fantasy · kuhaku_sora

RoarWritings

2yr

Commented

Wouldn't that break the balance of the game?

Code had holographic set wrapped around the head like a helmet. It allowed the players to transfer their thoughts inside the world filled with magic and monsters. People could become villains or heroes inside the world, and nobody could stop them, not even the game developers.

NPC Code: Red Riding Hood

Fantasy · kuhaku_sora

RoarWritings

2yr

Replied to MrChinchila

Oh. But I think you mentioned him wearing yukata or something. Maybe I read it wrong.

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Eastern · MrChinchila

RoarWritings

2yr

Replied to MrChinchila

At least you want to improve. keep it up.

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Eastern · MrChinchila

RoarWritings

2yr

Commented

Is this cat in human form or something? And is it male or female?

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Eastern · MrChinchila

RoarWritings

2yr

Commented

He just casually said lets kill some wolves?! Ain't he afraid or something?

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Eastern · MrChinchila

RoarWritings

2yr

Posted

So far it was a good read. The story is quite interesting and promising. I liked how author has represented everything. Simple yet interesting writing made me emerge into it. Keep it up. Waiting for new chaps.

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Fantasy · TofSpades

RoarWritings

2yr

Posted

The starting looks interesting and promising. But Xing being able to talk like a mature man from the birth even though he doesn't have any memory, It kinda feels weird to me. Nonetheless the story has potential. There are some grammatical and spelling mistakes. I hope writer will fix them and keep it in mind.

The Starry Death Swordsman

Eastern · JiyuYami

RoarWritings

2yr

Commented

How did you actually write this? :/

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