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Saving Elia gets you nothing. She'll never love Jorah. Her kids will come first. She's not Jorah's responsibility and that was her choice. Saving Lyanna will net you MASSIVE points with both Ned and Robert. Plus cucking Lannister plans of making Cerci Queen. Then when the battle of the dawn comes around Ned and Robert will listen to you.

Even Kishimoto couldn't write Shikamaru right. Characters can't be smarter than the author. That's why he wrote him lazy.

The story is already running too slow. With he sporadic updates and half step chapters. There's a lot of room for more detail about the world around you. The only time we get any depth is when you monologue about your life philosophy. Other than that you're just hitting plot points. If you try to add lewds I doubt you would ever finish another story again.

Good fight. Much Thanks.

If the Dragon Veins are cannon is the gelel stone as well?

If Jorah has magic will he become like Jonny Appleseed and strat planting trees? For the gains.

It's your story. Don't stress about what other people may think. Just do your best.

All my stones everytime you post a chapter. You're #Juan on my list.

If there's no penalty for adding extra chakra anytime you want the the lowest setting is the best. i.e. 1% or less. Now he's cut off access to 50% of his chakra for years. I thought this kid was supposed to be smart.

If he can set it at 1% and add extra whenever he's not using chakra why cut off access to 50% for years. Wasn't this kid supposed to be smart? You're kill my immersion dude.

It's nice to see a Hiruzen that actually tries to do his job proactively.

Yeah jumping to Chakra(naruto) or even worse Ki(Dragonball) skips alot of content. It would also be way to op for this world. I'd throw The Red Hood or a grown up Damien Wayne in there as alternates.

Dragon + Chi has to be the Iron Fist, Shan-Chi or his father Zheng Zu/Fu Manchu. With Chi being the physical energy then later Aura being spiritual energy. I like the chi/aura route instead of a Chakra(Naruto) or Ki(Dragonball) route because those would be way op in this world. I'd save those for later worlds. Arthur with his Dragon heart should have Immense talent for Chi. His reincarnated status should give him talent in aura.

Get chapter. Keep it up.

I really felt that you captured Sai's character in this chapter. I totally believe that this is how Sai would act. Good Job.

Kiba and Naruto remind me of the movie Pain and Gain. With Mark Wahlberg and The Rock.

Would James accept Snape? (Rhetorical question) No never. So a Lily James Snape harem wouldn't happen. I don't understand James. What does he do with his days. Doesn't he have any ambitions? He's an immortal who just stares at the wall all day? Why would she leave him? If she does leave him why choose Snape. She might love Snape like a brother but where is the attraction. I don't remember her ever being physically attracted to Snape. Lily is top tier. She's a beautiful immortal tower master. She could have a harem of disposable boy toys. Why would she settle?