Webnovel Author: Luzparadise_

Luzparadise_

2yr

Replied to Alaiza_May

salamat po! Mag-uupdate po ulit ako bukas <3

ch 0 7 Syete

The Wrath Of Jupiter (Tagalog/Filipino)

Teen · Luzparadise_

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

okay, I thought this would be some so-called romance story that has been a replica of other stories but I was wrong. Your concept was different and the first chapter was really interesting, you have your own way of making your story interesting and worth reading. Your story has a nice spacing and you did great with the dialogues but there is still a lot of things to improve but that's okay that is the part of life and you have so much potential just keep writing!! Adding this to my lib!

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

I am giving you five stars!!! I really love this!!! The first part made me already fall in love. It is very well written and very interesting, you did a great job illustrating the scenes in the first chapter. It's proved to me that your writing is on the highest level. I salute you! And I never expect that there would be actions here, I thought this would be some mild adventure story about a doctor? OMG! I thought it was because the title and book cover is cute. Sorry about that, LOl! In any way, your skills in writing are very great and this story is the biggest proof. Adding this to my library!

Herbs & Lotions - The Busy Life of Alfraed Logick

Fantasy · PWS

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

okay, so I really love this paragraph including the first two !!! I am in love, you did a great job writing them, I love it!!!

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Herbs & Lotions - The Busy Life of Alfraed Logick

Fantasy · PWS

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

Okay, so there is nothing much for me to say since it only consists of 3 chapters. The first one is notice and then so on. I am hoping to read more so I could properly say my thoughts. First of all, I thought that this story would be some kind of Romance? The modern one but the title made me think about if it really is. The chapter's length was average but I can see you put so much effort into writing it. The first chap was kind of interesting since there are some paragraphs in which you describe the ranks and some type of werewolves. you did great writing the dialogues of your characters. First, I was having a hard time memorizing the names of your characters since there were a lot of characters introduced in the first two chapters but I think that's my own problem. You have so much potential and I am hoping to see more, I'll add this to my library so I can read more. Keep writing Author!

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

Your book cover and the title are really interesting, I even misread the title and thought it was "Incognito" I'm sorry, author! HAHAHAHAHA! Anyway, and what's inside is more interesting. I love how the way you illustrate the scenes, you did well writing this story. I am in awe, really!!! I'll add this to my library! since I'll definitely gonna read further!!

Luzparadise_

2yr

Replied to Alaiza_May

salamat po! Mag u-update rin po ako!

ch 0 6 Sais

The Wrath Of Jupiter (Tagalog/Filipino)

Teen · Luzparadise_

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

first of all, I love your book cover since Fubuki from one punch man is there. She is my waifu so, points for you hahaha joke. Next, the title... I thought it would be horror but it's like a mystery novel. The synopsis is great, it's really interesting, this is pretty interesting and good but in the chapters, you used *smile* instead of using the " *smiles* " You can just use, "She started smiling," "She smiled" or anything that it could describe that person smiling. There is still a lot more to improve but that is part of life and you have potential. Keep writing!

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

great job!!! This is a great start!!!

Flames of fire kept flickering and dancing. Waves within waves quivering creating a crackling sound one could hear as the wood kept splitting due to the oppressive heat produced by the fire. Thus, emitting smoke into the surroundings.

Ghost Busters

Urban · Lonewo1f

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

this is a great book, the first chapter is really nice. The synopsis is really interesting and nice, kudos to you author. I could see that you made a great effort to write this story and it really pays off... I mean look how beautiful and well-written your novel is... it's really nice and I love it, it's already in my library because I love it, the storyline and interesting events really pulls me in to read more and who am I stop reading this masterpiece! Keep writing author!

How I Became the Strongest Sovereign

Fantasy · TofSpades

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

uhm... then leave...

"I've been getting tired and bored out of my mind for this role and it is true that I have been in control for too long; it is time that there's a shift in the balance of power. As my queen just stated the candidate tournaments are soon and I'm willing to put a handicap on my candidate." The lightning monarch continued speaking.

How I Became the Strongest Sovereign

Fantasy · TofSpades

Luzparadise_

2yr

Posted

GIVING YOU FIVE STARS MY QUEEN The first chapter is really good and the first start is all getting love-Dovey until someone died... I kept on repeating it since I couldn't believe it but I moved on. The chapters that I've read made me feel the reality that I am single and I will never experience that. Anyway, this has an interesting plotline and characters, with all those colorful-changing hair it's really interesting I am in love with this. You did a great job writing it and I'll read more!!! Definitely adding this masterpiece to my library!!

Thirsty Royals.

Fantasy · Dee_author

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

I'M SORRY BUT I REALLY FOUND THIS CUTE

"Stop, silly." Celine giggled, still flushed.

Thirsty Royals.

Fantasy · Dee_author

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

like this????

Soon he was standing on the moving horse like a gymnast.

Thirsty Royals.

Fantasy · Dee_author

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

"No! Noooooooo!", Lolo wailed, losing her mind to anguish. She held unto Marc's lifeless body, crying her eyes out.

Thirsty Royals.

Fantasy · Dee_author

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

uhm what just happened....

A flying arrow stabbed Marc's naked back in the heat of his passionate act!

Thirsty Royals.

Fantasy · Dee_author

Luzparadise_

2yr

Commented

this is interestingggg what a good start!!!

The couple, a young and perfectly handsome Red-haired man and his aqua Blue-haired heartthrob lay naked and entangled in fur coats they had spread out upon the snowy ground, making out in the open air.