Nice to see your back. Any luck with finding an editor
I would like to become your editor when you begin posting again.
Oh, and by the way, I am searching for an editor, not now! but when I return posting.
Anime & Comics · Seller986
Nice to see your not giving up on this story
Shocking right?
Anime & Comics · Seller986
Major threat has been added in chapter 17.
Also I would suggest that you keep a mixture of normal difficulty and high difficulty enemy's for the mc to fight. I read a lot of fanfiction and see a bunch of them fail due to lack of difficult problems for the mc to deal. You seem to be on right track so far with this fanfiction.
ch 13 Wasted
Anime & Comics · Seller986
This chapter is a good start to introduce the hunters group. I am really excited for the next chapter with that cliff hanger. I wonder how the mc will deal with the hunters. I would suggest that if the mc and hunter fight to make a really difficult fight. It would make sense if their sending of their elite units.
ch 13 Wasted
Anime & Comics · Seller986
I would suggest reading chapter four again. There is mention of a group of multiverse hunters that aim to kill any system users. The mc is not a one of those hunters but a system user who kills others for his own profit. Also there main motives is to restore balance to the multiverse by hunting down system users. Since they whole organization is made to hunt down system users which include the mc.
ch 12 What Happened?
Anime & Comics · Seller986
This story is pretty good so far. Next I suggest that you add reincarnation hunters soon. It would be a good idea to have a difficult enemy to deal with. Your character could use his acting skills to blend into the background until he can take them out. After all if they kill system users really easy then they must be really powerful and good at finding system users.
ch 12 What Happened?
Anime & Comics · Seller986
My character as only seen the main yugioh show. That is the main reason he does not know about Jaden
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Anime & Comics · dwarfking1999
This story seems to have a good starting point so far. I did like how you went into the action. Next I would recommend going more into details about other ultimate's since some of them might be curious about what you done to earn your fake ultimate title. Depending on how well your OC can lie other characters will grow in suspicion about your OC ultimate.
The Ultimate Survivor
Anime & Comics · NyanGod371