WinterTimeCrime

WinterTimeCrime

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The Cold-Blooded Goddess of Midnight Frost

2021-03-10 Joined Antarctica
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WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
1 years ago
Replied to MrVan

The MC does get a female lover.

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
1 years ago
Replied to Yuna_fantasia

Sure is!

That receptionist was super nice...and kind of hot, heh heh.

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Fantasy · WinterTimeCrime

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
2 years ago
Replied to JustABreeze

I'm glad you enjoyed it! 😊

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Replied to CanadianWolf

Thanks!

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Replied to CanadianWolf

Yeah, it is a bit tricky to understand. But think of it as 'just a way's from here,' or 'it's over yonder.' It doesn't really give a specific distance or time relative to the location. :)

"We're considerably close, just a far's way from here. We should reach Adelade by tonight."

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Fantasy · WinterTimeCrime

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Replied to CanadianWolf

Depending on where a person's head is cut, their severed throat may tighten causing the victim (if they haven't died from shock) to produce a choked spasm from any blood, mucus, or other fluids stuck in the lungs or throat. :D

The beast turned to whoever dared interrupt its feast, but before it could fully maneuver, a blade cut its head clean off. Blue liquid secreted from its eyes and nose; the beast looked to its killer in silence, letting out a gasp as it choked on its own fluids.

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

Fantasy · WinterTimeCrime

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Posted

I like the narrative, very interesting conversations, and lots of unique dialogue. I laughed at the scene in Ch. 17 when he said he couldn't understand women, and oh boy, sometimes I do not. 🤣 Nice job, keep writing!

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Posted

Nice start with an interesting premise. I like how the story gave a few small indents from the author themselves, truly made me enjoy the story even more. Keep it up!

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WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Posted

The dialogue has a decent flow and the use of hyphens instead of quotations marks was an interesting way to read, the first I've seen. World-building and character design can use some work, I couldn't visualize any settings nor conversations being had in the first few lines which are crucial to captivating a reader. Despite the needed touching-up, it's a decent read.

WinterTimeCrime
WinterTimeCrime
3 years ago
Posted

The story had a decent flow, and the dialogue was believable. POV made all of the situations Anastasia gets into. A few of your first chapters have some grammatical errors and typos, but those can be easily fixed in the proofreading process. Another point, using identifiers like 'said' and 'asked' can get a bit bland and repetitive; I suggest pairing a character's voice with a specific action, how they look, tone, etc. Keep writing, all the best.

  • Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World original

    Let's Imagine a Female Knight from Another World

    Fantasy R18 DARK TRANSMIGRATION TRAGEDY ISEKAI KILLER SCARY

    4.96 Completed

    After an untimely death, Momoko Miwa is transported to Euphoria's troubled lands by the Goddess of Sorcery. She embraces the opportunity despite her fantasy misconceptions when tasked with defeating the ominous Evil King. Placed in Phoenia, a powerful nation under magical scrutiny, Momoko grapples with unfolding magical secrets, tested alliances, and shattered mentalities. Will she rise as a formidable Holy Knight or succumb to the overwhelming challenges of her new surroundings? Want to support me directly? https://www.patreon.com/wintertimecrime Check out Callixtus (a VRMMO similar to Let's Imagine) on Royal Road, ScribbleHub, and, for the earliest chapters, my Patreon!

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