So far I think you’ve done well in trying to convey that
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Huhu~ I see your point 😌✨
ch 317 Skipping Too Many Steps
Fantasy · DustyDream
👍✨
ch 32 Bonus Chapter: Youuuth!
Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
While i do admit that the ending seemed kind of rushed, i dont necessarily think that it was bad though. Anyway, Vol. 2 seems to have more of a plot and i’m enjoying reading it
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
I suggest that if you really want to write it, then perhaps read other authors’ work as a reference or guide. It’s never going to be perfect on your first try, but you’ll get there.
(A/N: I am so bad at English that I can't even make good small fan service, dang it!)
Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
You’ll get there 😂👍
(A/N: I am so bad at English that I can't even make good small fan service, dang it!)
Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Is the yuri coming soon? 😭 not to rush you tho, just curious
ch 32 Bonus Chapter: Youuuth!
Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Of course! I really like this story
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Hey it should be “he has” instead of “he have”
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Here there is no need to put ‘a’ before ‘good hips’ because hips is plural
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Hi, so you mention at the start of each chapter that you want us to correct any grammar we find, I don’t normally do this because i’m not sure how to correct grammar without sounding rude 😅 but um so instead of “were” it should be “where” Sorry if this accidentally came off as me being rude
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Fantasy · SORAhasGONE
Oohh is Core slowly starting to become a yandere?
ch 202 Chapter 202 A sudden event
Fantasy · Delirish
Thank you for the chapter!
ch 15 Chapter 15 – Contract
Fantasy · ShuviLily
You eat a pizza a lot 😂
(Author:...I don't know what you're talking about *eating pizza* *nom*)
Fantasy · Vinzky
Oh ok, no problem!
ch 0 9 Chapter 7: What my fault?!
Fantasy · Vinzky
This reminds me of Shimoneta 😅
Of course, Emilia wasn't listening at all, as her eyes had almost glazed over, and once her supply of love nectar ran dry from Dixie's milky white thighs, she gave them a punishing bite before moving directly to devour the source.
Fantasy · DustyDream
Hello, um i did make a comment about a spelling mistake (very minor) but it seems to have dissapeared and i’m not sure if you saw it. sorry i dont usually comment about grammar but you ordered so i felt that i should, but Im uncertain whether it’s there or not
ch 0 9 Chapter 7: What my fault?!
Fantasy · Vinzky
Hey I think you might have meant “on the handle” not “in the handle”….I mean both kinda work but “in the handle” is kinda odd and I’m not sure if you meant it that way. Sorry if this sounds condescending, Im not trying to be, I dont usually correct typos but you ordered so….
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Fantasy · Vinzky
You’re welcome 😊
A hollow's story(An isekai story)
Fantasy · SORAhasGONE