Ella and Alisha are pretty interesting, I really want to see more of them. But there's one more thing. I am starting to really dislike Helkep, don't really know why. I think you should add a little bit of positivity to him. He's quite rude and arrogant and really overconfident to me, unless you want him to be. But I would prefer someone with a hint of positivity to play the Mc.
ch 28 Emergency
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
I'm currently going out of city, so won't be uploading. By the way, school starts at April 11 right?
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
The last three chapter have been really LONG! and I love it!!!
ch 26 Impossible Before Level 10
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
I think you shouldn't put laughing 2 times.
As if insanity had finally taken over, he started laughing, laughing his guts out.
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
*was dry?
He was weeping silently, while hugging himself. His eyes were red from crying and his throat dry.
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
Lol.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Actually that's not a typo. I do want 'it' to be there. I think the word 'insane' is not a right fit.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Actually no, as it told you before, you have to be familiar with the previous chapter to understand the next chapter. In chapter 2, there is a dedicated paragraph for those scissors.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Oooooo! Another typo, thanks.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
This actually wasn't a typo but you are right. This sentence is a bit confusing, I'll change it.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
I don't understand what you mean.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
By the way, each chapter almost depends upon another. So if you haven't read chapter 1 or 2, you won't understand chapter 3.
"Ughh! Let me tell ya, I went there to get some leaves to decorate my house, do you understand it now pal? Mangrove cleared all of Milo's doubts.
Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Ummm.. No actually he is talking about the forest, where the story started.
"Ughh! Let me tell ya, I went there to get some leaves to decorate my house, do you understand it now pal? Mangrove cleared all of Milo's doubts.
Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Actually he saying Ooooooh! in frustration, so I don't think Huh! would suit it.
"Ooooooo! I do not live here, I live in the kingdom, not this swamp. I've never been here. Got it?" Mangrove stated that he hadn't seen the swamp before.
Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
Thanks for pointing the typos.
But without a lot of other complications, they successfully crossed the mud part. Now, it was time to cross the vines. Milo's heart almost sank as he saw vines. The vines at that swamp were very far-spread and on them, were very sharp points. But were they also Magical? Milo and Mangrove were about to find about.
Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
He did warn him in chapter 1 when the forest incident occured.
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Fantasy · Disney_Cloud
That's insane. Good job!
ch 24 Broken By The World
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
May I ask how many words are in this chapter??
ch 24 Broken By The World
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko
Ohhhhh.... My mistake. I forgot he is emotionless so obviously he would be rude and arrogant. No problem in that, Good job!
ch 28 Emergency
The Seven Calamities
Fantasy · Nikola_Niko