With each chapter your Grammer gets worse and worse, you are unlearning English with each ch
ch 0 9 chapter 9
Anime & Comics · EroJaki
The difference in quality between the first chapter which is a 9/10 and the second 6/10 is just mind breaking. Did you write the first one ? And if you did what happens on the second one.
ch 0 2 chapter 2 (edited)
I tried to read most of it but I only made it to chapter 16, The begining is really rough. Things are mostly unexplained and thing just magically work for Shirou. Everything is center too much on Shirou and it damages the environment creation. I personally didn't like the way you specified who was talking but that's just me.
Anime & Comics · OrionClay18062000
You realize your making him a Mary sue right? Things magically fixed themselves when Shirou walks into the room, The calificación is 4.7 but so far this story is a solid 1.4
ch 0 8 Cleansed
Ok, after catching up and finishing the story I can correct my previous Review. I still think the first chapter around 1-20 are messy and feel rush. Around the middle 20-48 the story reaches what I would consider it's peak. The story is really good and better organized. From 48-56 it gets a little crack-fic with the whole god debacle but around the most recent chapter it goes back to it's previous peak.
Anime & Comics · Xshamee
The story is a mess, I don't understand what kind of episodic sequence you tried to pull of but it didn't go well. Every two chapters there's an ending? But it's not an ending?
For once in his life he used his head, yet he did the most stupid thing I've seen. He used one of his 3 public, knows, famous transformation.
ch 255 Convictions
Anime & Comics · Einlion
Aight, you should stop were you are. NO MORE WOMEN, There's a point when it goes from funny and interesting to simply boring and disrespectful to the characters.
ch 176 Refusal
Gonna be kinda weird when my boi realizes the truth about Syr (or maybe you don't know Mr Author)
ch 175 Prince Charming
Hahaha, perfect ending for type-moon, a bittersweet feeling. I love it.
ch 116 Positions.
Anime & Comics · Soul_Caliber
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With each chapter your Grammer gets worse and worse, you are unlearning English with each ch
ch 0 9 chapter 9
Sinful life with the strongest system
Anime & Comics · EroJaki