Itsme_Hang

2yr

Replied to VashuRajput269

Just bad writing

What frustrated him the most was that he couldn't move much. He wanted to move! He was stationary in his previous life that is, he was sitting on the seat on the plane and the journey was very long and died. And here he was immobile again. He wanted to walk, jump, roll and most of all travel to places the most!

Vampire's Slice Of Life

Fantasy · SocialHippo

Itsme_Hang

2yr

Commented

Wut why is this randomly here… probably could have been written better. Dont hust unnecessarily add info out of nowhere it kind of throws off the reader…

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Vampire's Slice Of Life

Fantasy · SocialHippo

Itsme_Hang

2yr

Commented

I honestly thing this novel is getting cheesier and more cliché… or maybr just me

ch 79 Chapter 79: The game day. 2

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

Itsme_Hang

2yr

Commented

Honestly great story just that the grammar needs a bit of improving some sentences are hard to read and i needed to read it twice to understand it but overall great stort.

"You know, Lady Violet, I'm a very scared man. I'm very scared of dying and, because of that, I need to defend myself; I don't want to die from a bullet in my head." He spoke while making exaggerated gestures.

My Three Wives Are Beautiful Vampires.

Fantasy · Victor_Weismann

Itsme_Hang

2yr

Commented

too much unnecessary info...

The shipwreck doesn't make for a pretty sight, especially not from further away. Like discarded waste, she seems to not belong in these waters. She hangs heavily to one side and the paint of where her name used to be had all but faded to nothingness. A wide range of possessions and many different crates mark her true story up to her demise. Whatever contents were inside some of them have long been claimed by ocean creatures as all broken containers are empty.

I am the young master

Eastern · Amiro0o

Itsme_Hang

2yr

Commented

lol i got trolled if i may say so thought a new chap came out was really happy and then saw it was just an announcement oh well keep up the good work :)