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I think the fluff chapter is not necessary, you have already done many, you should already conquer Jen, Jessica, Felicia and Silver, give them the serums, tell Gwen about the harem, get better, you said it yourself the cliché of stealing from Oscorp In spiderman fanfics, it works because it's something logical to do, no matter how cliché it may be, I think that after the invasion you should put in a few chapters of fluff with all its girls, but now you have to take advantage of the impulse that you gave to your Peter with the kidnapping of yuri and make it more proactive

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I think you got the idea but I don't know if it was a good thing that Peter forgot about Cletus, if he doesn't know about him, (carnage-cletus) with his meta knowledge, then it's okay that he forgot about him and see another rapist, Although since that violation did occur, I think that he had to follow up on that case, this is already his own opinion, but it is also another good point for you because it was good that you presented minor threats, you should do more caps like this (fights) there are many villains and villains to increase their power and harem, you've always placed a lot of emphasis on everything abstract about the superior gods and all that, and although it's fine, we all know that it takes a long time for that to take consistency, so it's good that do this kind of thing, and yes, I know that you are using the ucm mostly but you should also add to the x men, there is an opportunity for good fights and good women to conquer

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spiderman has always been weaker than the symbiotes at least physically, he has been able to beat them because their weaknesses are very exploitable such as fire and sound, but physically they are stronger

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I think you are going down in the ranking because you have not done anything in history, no offense, but there are already 70 or so caps and you only have gwen, yuri and may, you left the conquest of silver halfway, you have not fought important, you have not made important conquests, it is just that you are starting with felicia, at the beginning it seemed that you had good ideas, and that you could innovate the stories in webnovel a little but it has already become repetitive and boring, hopefully you can improve and save history

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