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Hmmm i could see that there is some improvement. Keep it up.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
Hmm... hiding his ability like Kiyopon, I see...
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Fantasy · lon_okami
Oh ho ho. The turning point is near.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
Me, a math nerd, be like: wait til you get to linear law.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
awww... I was hoping Sui-san would fight. Well, that was a good fight though!
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Fantasy · lon_okami
Hmm... interesting. You like Genshin? Well, this chapter is pretty good. Easy to understand for a guy like me who gets bored really easily.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
OwO So this story is inspired by cote. COTE with magic. This chapter is pretty good and yes, it is pretty interesting. Now, I should continue reading and see if my predictions are correct.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
Hmmm... so far so good. Again, there are some grammatical errors. I think some editing would do it some good again. I would say the paragraphs were a bit too packed, so maybe separating a few of the sentences into shorter ones would be good.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
When I saw that name of the academy, it just reminds me of COTE.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
The narration is pretty good. Sorry if I am rude, but I did notice some grammatical errors. Making a quick edit or two will help make the chapter better.
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Fantasy · lon_okami
For now, since it is just the first chapter, I won't be making a detailed review. All I can say for now is keep up the good work! I will be waiting for the next chapter when it arrives.
Soul for a Girlfriend?
Realistic · lon_okami