so cliche smh. next were gonna see them in the competition and theyre gonna recognize him and gang up on him or want to fight him for her or something
Athan frowned a bit and was going to release his hands from Avelia's grip when she grabbed his hand tighter and spoke angrily towards the man, " It's none of your damn business who he is. Now don't disturb me. "
Fantasy · LivingVoid
can she just die off already? or can he go take her to a nest of grade 6 beasts and leave her there to get killed by them
She then looked in Athan's direction with complicated expression and thought, ' Athan, From now own, I swear that I will let you fall for me fair and square...Because only through you, I can achieve my life goal which is also the reason why I'm still alive. '
Fantasy · LivingVoid
and he claimed his character isnt western or eastern smh, thats an eastern thing smh.
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Fantasy · LivingVoid
wish i received a massage when i open anything to the 2nd page ;(
After scrolling down a bit more, Athan hit the end of the first page in Point Shop, But when he tried to open the 2nd Page, He received a massage.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
like FUCK I GET IT ITS HALF STOP YELLING AT ME
<Athan Long:~ Elemental Overlord ( HALF ) >
Fantasy · LivingVoid
lightning aerial wings is a bad name, aerial and wings are basically the same thing, its like saying cold ice. like well ice is already cold though why bother saying cold ice? aerial wings, wings are used for flying so why add the aerial part?
After thinking about it for some time, Athan thought of creating a Flying Wing spell, the Wings he designed will need Air and Lightning, and it will be named as <Lightning Aerial Wings>
Fantasy · LivingVoid
pretty sure that would still fall under "earth" since metal/ores would be a sub category of earth
-Black Metallic Crystal:::Suit
Fantasy · LivingVoid
i honestly agree, like ive read worse where its unreadable, this guy although its shabby and has hundreds of writing errors its still mostly readable and doesnt make reading it impossible, and its consistently readable so im fine with it, but you should find someone to edit it and make it a bit more legible as itll make reading it a lot smoother and more immersive other than getting stuck on a sentence or word trying to make heads or tails of what its trying to say.
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Fantasy · LivingVoid
.... i dont know if you remember but rn hes 17 while they are 30 and 40... does he have a thing for cougars or something? if not let him get with someone younger smh
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Fantasy · LivingVoid
hes not there to make friends, hes there to get strong and return to get revenge on his killers smh
A year passed just like this, as Athan continued to work and train.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
does this mean when he leaves to go back to his little cottage house hes gonna walk back naked or something?
' Now what could this be? ' while wondering about what this water is about, Athan sat inside the bathtub as his clothes were already burned because he forgot to take them off before.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
was it really 3rd person? it felt like it was all just a mashing of both for every single chapter
IMPORTANT: This chapter and the previous chapter were completely in 3rd person POV writing, BUT chapter 1 to 6 were in POV of Athan and occasionally 3rd person POV. SO here is the QUESTION. Which one do you prefer? Should I stick to a completely 3rd Person POV or a mixture of Athan's POV and 3rd person POV? please let me know in the comment section.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
passed the taste?
After that last participant who failed, the remaining 5 participants, including mike, passed the taste, but Mike's eye suddenly closed as he started floating, Seeing this scene, Lafurge sent everyone except Mike away from the platform as he looked intently at Mike.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
i dont think you read what happened did you? it was said he was cut up and had his nails pulled out. he wasnt just "beaten up" he was actually tortured brutally.
But as soon as I remembered what happened to me in my previous life, I gritted my teeth as I stopped shouting.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
theres honestly no point in pointing out errors, the chapters starting from the very beginning is littered with them in such a high number its like it was written by someone who took basic english and flunked it.
Hearing Uncle Lee's voice, Me and Mike came out. Uncle Lee also told us about various things and gave us helpful advice on the way, so We were really thankful to him.
Fantasy · LivingVoid
smh its reckon not recon
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Fantasy · LivingVoid
why is he being killed when shes the one visiting him? he stayed away while she didnt why is he being hurt for it?
A rough sound of a man came from the other side of the phone, "Boss Lanry, Madam Lily visited that boy's house with a small bag; we don't know her purpose for visiting him. What should we do?"
Fantasy · LivingVoid
ah yes, the old fruit loop fields.
When the group finally saw the city of Heliodas, Jake recognized the cereal fields, but also the garbage and slum heaps around the city wall. The smells of sewage and sweat mingled again and again with the cheap perfumes of the prostitutes and stalls.
The Oracle Paths
Sci-fi · Arkinslize