Writing to write. :) Currently updating Sorceror...Cyborg??? Discord: https://discord.gg/9V7Umgvy3p Ko-Fi: https://ko-fi.com/very_yellow_newt Appreciate all feedback and comments.
2021-04-13 Joined Global
whoops! Thanks for that.
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Hello i_love_magic I really appreciate you coming back and leaving this kind comment. I would like to say however, that many of the criticisms raised by yourself and other readers are valid. To be completely honest, most of the time I agree with them. This novel was the very first thing I've ever written, and thanks to this, the early chapters are very weak. I appreciate any and all feedback, thoughts and criticisms left behind, since they are what has allowed me to be improve as a writer. Thanks :)
ch 0 3 Road to the Academy
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Thank you! Have you seen The Gene Wizard yet?
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
rowboat!
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
thank u
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
His nickname :)
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
On the breastplate? Yes, it's a side profile... I should have been clearer
On the breastplate, the same lion the palace guard wore on their chests stood, yet the green eye of the lion was a gleaming emerald.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Awesome!
Slowly but surely, Kothar's beam of plasma cut through each of the beams, the ends of the beams now glowing red hot, a gap now torn between them, as well as through the door itself.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
He doesn't have the same abilities he did then
Seeing the two titanic birds clash, Kothar realized the sheer power of even the beasts on this world and was resolved to increase his combat ability. One of the birds he had seen earlier would be the equal of a warship in his previous life, this planet was truly dangerous.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
thanks kotik
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Thanks sir
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
It seems that it's very difficult to get one's hands on the devices used...
Anyone could apply and study at the Academy, but the Academy recommended an aptitude screening, as a mage without sufficient aptitude would spend years mastering a basic spell, while others could master the same spell in weeks. There was still a place for everyone in the Academy, with mages of low aptitude becoming great scholars of magical theory and even teaching at the Academy.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
I have countless fingers!
Zac peeked out from where he huddled, the wolves around too quickly to count them accurately, but there had to be almost twenty within the clearing.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
He can do that, but I think the author didn't think about that at the time.
[It won't be too terrible, the gravity doesn't seem to be so strong here, I have been falling fro a while.] Kothar said, almost cheerful. The blue of the water below him gradually filled his view, and he braced for impact. Kothar took a deep breath and held it, then everything went blank.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
It's black! Did I say it was brown earlier?
"I shall return in a few months, your parents may have need of me. If you need something send word through Jotun's shop." He embraced Kothar, patting his curly brown locks.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
hmmmmm they only eat one man at a time? :)
The forest which held Man-Eating Deer had been chosen as the beast that had guarded it hadn't been sighted for many many years, but locals were still loath to go near it, not wanting to deal with even the weaker deer in the absence of their ruler.
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
thank u!
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Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Hahahaha, he's just an average guy, thrown into a bad situation.
ch 10 Young Male, Nude and Laughing Uncontrollably
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt
Lmao
ch 23 See You On The Outside
The Gene Wizard
Fantasy · Very_yellow_Newt