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There were 5 wishes. -Lineage -Devil Fruit -Immunity to water (that is completely separate and unnecessary, you already have your lineage, you can use the excuse that with this you have greater resistance and tolerance towards water but you also have no immunity) -The three hakis - Know how to handle the sword. The truth is that I didn't like the first chapter.

It seems that we are entering a new arc and this beginning seems very good to me. I guess they will announce Fujin as a jounin, a capable elite jounin after some missions so that he can become known in the ninja ranks, after all he can be considered S rank. And it may be that Fujin will become a master jounin after all hiruzen. he wants to increase Fujin's influence for his own plans. (If he becomes a jounin master I hope it is with a new team, in turn this can help Fujin to always be so alone) Apart from all this, Very good work author 👌

Honestly, it's a good move on her part to focus on interacting with Naruto, who wouldn't want the support of a blonde with broken powers. You get more future benefits than disadvantages.

I'm left wanting an entire chapter :c

The protagonist knows that since he arrived in that world there will be slight changes, but he obviously acts that way because he doesn't want to do something that could leave him vulnerable or something that he can't handle in the future.

These last jutsus, are you sure they were in the library? For example, Jiraya's jutsu, this is his personal jutsu and I don't think he puts it in the library, also to use it you have to have long hair, it's not that this jutsu lengthens your hair and then returns to its natural state. Another Tobirama justus that is a classified that must be in the scroll sealed in the hokage tower, since it is a powerful genjutsu apart from a great weapon against the uchigas

Didn't you see Naruto? Or you don't remember that at that time kirigakure is divided and at war, and the last thing the mei terumi rebel faction wants is to have more enemies. 😐🤨

Are you serious? Robin can read clearly but said she couldn't read out loud "acting like a slum girl" xd

They would trace Robin's origin, investigating the island where she was supposedly born looking for the records of her birth and family, apart from that if they don't find anything, it will clearly be suspicious because there is no information about her. . There is also the matter of Ohara, the navy and the world government are going to look for the inhabitants of that island since they can also take them as a possible threat, in this way they can connect information, since Robin was on a nearby island and not there is no information about her. They were able to figure out that Ace was Roger's son, how can they not figure out who Robin is other than the fact that he also looks a lot like his mom? Probably at first they will let her into the marina but only to keep an eye on her and in a short time they will find out the truth, this way the MC will see him as a suspect.

Vergo's is very different, since he is a partner of Donflamingo. Donflamigo apart from the fact that in the future he will be a shichibukai, he is also a former world noble and he is also someone very powerful in the underworld, he is someone capable with a lot of experience in that matter. On the other hand, the MC doesn't have a very elaborate plan for this, he's doing it very spur-of-the-moment for obvious reasons, which creates a lot of loopholes in this matter.

Hay demasiados agujeros en este primer capítulo, la idea de la fruta es buena. Será mejor que reescribas esto porque está muy mal desarrollado.

i was liking it so far but robin joining the marines seems impossible to me. After all, the navy is a world power for a reason, and they wouldn't let anyone join before investigating everything about that person, after all, they have a great intelligence network.

well, fuyona can be with mei and suiren. After all, his clan is almost extinct, so at some point they were going to tell him about restoring his clan, as haku and kimimaro when he is old enough, he will have to be in Cra. Actually, I don't see many of the problems, it would be very silly if their whole relationship were to be broken because of that. After all, so far, only two male yukis (fuyona and haku) and two from the kaguya clan (fuyona and kimimaro) are known. According to Cra's law, you must have at least 4 wives. You have no excuse here, author, since you gave him a lineage and this aside stayed in the village of Kiri, he is obliged to be the head of the clan. Also, they will probably choose you from mizukage, so they will be more pressured for restoration.

I hope you don't reject Hinata's feelings, you have a really good waifu. Also this hinata seems a bit dangerous, it is better to have her by your side, than to have her as your "enemy".