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Sounds goooood!
"Kena, you heard me the first time. "I'd like to take you to a party." We were both seated in the back of the classroom, and his chair was very close to mine, so you can imagine what that little bit of space was doing to my already twitchy heart. It wasn't amusing.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
"Kena, what..." he started to say but I quickly placed my hand over his mouth which cause his eyes to widen slightly.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
Poor guy, he looked genuinely confused and terrified. God, at that point, for the first in my life, I felt completely shitty about my messed-up sense of humour, if it could even be called that.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
ch 0 2 Chapter One: The road to Greenvale
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
He is a violent man :(
"I said, stay." Dad's voice was hard and harsh, and the fear in the eyes of Mum made it even ten times scarier for younger me. Then, just when I thought I couldn't possibly be any more scared, Dad's voice rang out again,
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
"I don't think I want to go out with you anymore; I'm way too worked up right now. I'm going to take Kena, get her the damn dog, and come back later." I overheard Dad say to Mum, but something about the way he said it sent shivers down my spine.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
hmm...
"Oh, please, I saw what I saw, and she proves it to me every single day! So don't take me for a fool, because so help me God you'll regret it!"
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
An intriguing beginning!
ch 0 1 Prologue
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
giving up wasn't the best solution, I suppose.
The Goddess looked for that one person for thousands of years, but she soon discovered that no one, gods or men, could really love anyone 100 per cent and that if given the chance, many would prefer someone else other than the partners they claimed to love completely. She was so depressed and lonely as a result of this realization that she decided it was best to give up on love and stop looking.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU
Interesting introduction
ch 0 1 prologue.
The gods: unparalleled.
Eastern · Bright_Gabriel_9341
"Anyway, now that his son has awakened, he must need to visit and pass some wisdom to him. However, I don't know his method of appearance. After all, immortals and gods aren't supposed to interfere with the activity of mortals. It doesn't matter if his child is a demigod."
The gods: unparalleled.
Eastern · Bright_Gabriel_9341
not a good thing ;)
"Aren't you so lucky?" Makena batted her lashes, "Your best friend is your boss."
Allow me to love fictiously
Urban · Miss_Elated03
"We didn't mean to upset you." Aurum joined in, sounding uninterested. It's not surprising, Cory nudged her to speak.
Allow me to love fictiously
Urban · Miss_Elated03
So far so good! You pay attention to the language so it's a pleasure to read it.
ch 20 You want to reap where you did not sow
Peerless Mind.
Fantasy · Bright_Gabriel_9341
An intriguing beginning!
ch 0 1 The encounter. edited
Peerless Mind.
Fantasy · Bright_Gabriel_9341
Dear Author, From the very beginning, the reader can feel that author has a concept for the whole story. The plot is intriguing, and your characters are interesting. You nicely build not only the characters but also the background. Your English is good, so it's pleasure to read it. I love Kenna and I hope for a happy ending.
Lost Treasure: A churchmouse dream
Fantasy · DelphineIU