Yarakiri - Profile

I'm sick and tired of this harem..... it's ruining the whole story.

Not summon something he absolutely needs every time. Like for example a basic 4 star warrior, nothing more. He was unlucky and that's it. Don't do it with a 4 star summon which has incredible potential and which would also strangely solve the monkey problems which took place 2 chapters before. If everything fits like that it's too easy, your story has no life if that's the case. This is real advice that I give you to take your story to the next level.

This kind of coincidence that ruins the whole story...

Really this novel is destroyed by the harem.... Everything is grandiose and well organized but nothing is reflected on the romance, same error as with all the other xianxia....

A sequel planned one day?

I don't understand why he didn't directly treat the leader of the paladins... Seems like a priority to me.

I'm just waiting for Liza to return now. I hope she will come back by forcing Khan to marry her by pushing the world army to bring their two species together, that would turn everything upside down!

It seems cool to me that it's Maria he ends up with, it's a change from other novels where the first female role appears from the beginning...

Just wishing to be his wife is such a wasted wish in my opinion. Whoever did this will lose the little thought I had for them until now. xD

Why do we end up with a 1 vs 2 when there are 15,000 around? A bit strange during a war, I understand that the other Kitsun want to see them demolished. But the chef is supposed to be intelligent and kept saying that Mickael should not be underestimated. In short, I don't understand the purpose of this chapter.

I bet it's the introduction of the Fl!

Yes, that's a bit of the problem with this type of application. Readers always want more content, which gives a lot of pressure, which makes many authors miss world building. To overcome this I think you should make longer chapters where adding a little description would go unnoticed and would embellish your story. But not easy to do, I admit...

Thank you, good luck and keep it up!

Also important question, Is the librarian the leader of his entire race or just a highly placed person? If it's the first I'll be very disappointed because it's very poorly done.