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You’re crazy. really tho, thanks so much for the review. Still, congrats on that big number, eh? I hope you make lots and lots of money from mgs and donations [img=update]

Bruhhhh dis dude

The start is definitely a bit slow, but it’s still worth it! The only issue I have is the sometimes, the plot is a bit too convoluted and confusing to understand, so I’m left not knowing what is happening. Either way, an amazing read! Keep up the good work!

It’s incredibly well writing. All emotions are displayed properly and in detail, but not overly so. The main girl sticks to her personality and I really like that! She wants love, not money. All in all, an amazing novel! 5/5!

An absolute diamond amongst coal. 1. The story is incredibly well-written. The flow is like a river that keeps getting stronger, and stronger until the climax or the waterfall. The author is incredible at doing this. 2. The plot has potential and is interesting. The MC would do anything for his sister and goes to extreme lengths to care for her. 2a. His personality is very human, in that he is selfish, yet apologetic about it. He is a regular man who can’t resist the allure of beauty. It’s a balance that I’ve never seen before. The author actually managed to capture what a real human would react like when seeing a beautiful woman: they stare and stare, but he isn’t a pervert who thinks about screwing her the moment they meet. Now, there are some spelling mistakes, but they are ALL easily forgivable. This is actually great. If I could, it would be a solid 10/5. But I have to settle for 5/5 sadly.

The story had an amazing premise way out into the future. Starting out, it’s quite confusing, but it gets better as time goes on. Keep on reading, you’ll enjoy it! And author-san, keep writing! Continue!

I really, really like the premise. The title is seriously promising for a really good book, but I have two issues with this novel. First of all, the synopsis, or lack thereof. Just saying “try it” makes me reluctant to try it as it seems you have no idea what your novel will be about. It is eye catching, but I’d prefer if you explained what happens in the first few chapters of the story, maybe introducing the major plot? For example, the guns. Second of all, some of the speech bubbles are missing quotation marks. This wouldn’t be something I bother with, but your writing style makes it hard to discern between text and speech sometimes. Now, this is still a good novel with a lot of potential. Just looking at the cover tells me that author-san is a new author, but I can be patient. Improving the synopsis, improving the cover and remembering to add quotation marks do wonders for first time readers of your novel. All in all, a 5/5, but the mistakes and the synopsis bring it down to a 4.8/5. Lovely novel, thanks lots and don’t be discouraged by my criticism!

Very interesting concept of a monke who totally isn’t Harambe. Not at all. But since there are only 4 chapters, I can only comment on this. I really, really hope you continue with this book since you just introduced the first world! Good luck author-san :)