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Thanks for the chapter that cover looks really good, you should also let him were those robes atleast desribe it lol since it would be cool to imagine when reading. A bit of a comment which by no means you should take to seriously since it is your novel and you decice. But in my opinion I find the reaction of him killing by aang a bit lacklustre so to say since it is a pretty big theme in the story about him not killing and such and him seeing someone kill I would think he would react more disturbed atleast distance himself from that person or trying to convince him. (Although technically in the show he would have killed alot(People he threw of cliffs and such))
ch 15 Chapter 15
Avatar The Last Airbender: Not Avatar
Anime & Comics · Vandalizer
Just had a thought he probably can make his walls with bedrock and if you think it's ugly you can just do it only with the inside of the walls so when their is like a siege of the walls or something like that the walls can't be broken.
ch 20 Chapter Twenty: Magic is amazing.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
You could also add for evokers that they need a lot of recourses to do their spells, because the magic system they used to use worked only in minecraft and is harder to use on planetos, because magis is less dense, so then it is less attractive to have a lot of evokers.
Hi everyone, I'm posting this here because almost nobody reads the author's notes, so, I'm asking for ideas on how I could make the Pillagers, Vindicators, Witches and Evokers loyal to the MC once he summons them, since I don't know which way to go, and while I could give them loyalty to the MC in the same way that happened with the villagers; just because he is their creator in this world, I feel it would be too easy.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
Only problem could be if they want to use people like the dothraki as experimental things, but for that you have to think of something else + could be plot.
Hi everyone, I'm posting this here because almost nobody reads the author's notes, so, I'm asking for ideas on how I could make the Pillagers, Vindicators, Witches and Evokers loyal to the MC once he summons them, since I don't know which way to go, and while I could give them loyalty to the MC in the same way that happened with the villagers; just because he is their creator in this world, I feel it would be too easy.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
For pillagers I look at them similar as a dothraki or a barbarian tribe or even a bit of mercenary's. So for them you could offer money and use them mainly what they are used for. Vindicator and Evokers are similar to pillagers as they are from the same illiger species, but are more "spiritily/magic" alligned so they have the same goal so I think it should be fine to have the same method. Ofcourse you could also see them differently as them being just inherently being hostile to humans do to race then a ritual or something can work so that you bind them to you so a blood contract as someone else stated or the like. For witches you could see them as wanting to use you as ingredient in game so that is why they attack or being afraid that you would steal. So they are like mad scientists so give them unlimeted resources and they can work for you. Only problem could be if they want to use people like the dothraki as experimental things, but for that you have to think of something else + could be plot
Hi everyone, I'm posting this here because almost nobody reads the author's notes, so, I'm asking for ideas on how I could make the Pillagers, Vindicators, Witches and Evokers loyal to the MC once he summons them, since I don't know which way to go, and while I could give them loyalty to the MC in the same way that happened with the villagers; just because he is their creator in this world, I feel it would be too easy.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
Well maybe he just likes them not everyone wants to do things as efficient as possible that would just turn boring so he is just doing what he thinks is fun and he was more thrown into the position and just kept it as he liked it. So yeah the smart thing to do is only keep villagers, but that is just not the preference of the MC and the author(I think), which I understand.
ch 13 Chapter Thirteen: Heavyweight.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
Since I can't be a ghost reader for a chapter I will give some feedback. Great story so far with a really interesting concept. Wouldn't have thought of it before except that I saw another story with the same concept only with modded minecraft and written less in my taste. Like the structure of your chapters are great with both describtions and what he is doing in good proportions maybe a bit more interactions, but that will also come late probably. Also great pacing so far. Maybe a thing that you could add is pictures of the buildings he build and things like that.
Your constructive ideas and comments are accepted, I want fewer ghost readers and more readers who interact with the story to help me improve.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
I don't feel talken to I am not at all a complete ghost reader lol
Your constructive ideas and comments are accepted, I want fewer ghost readers and more readers who interact with the story to help me improve.
ASOIAF/GOT: Minecraft in Essos.
TV · Marcia_05
Grammer until now was good I think only place where I found something was in the chapter before when Aemon walked into the room and it said "The Aemon woaked over" instead of "Aemon walked over" ,but for this chapter it was good.
ch 0 5 Adella
House of the dragon: The Green King
TV · Argent1971
Its just that the environment describing and such is just a tad repetitive in content. atleast for now haven't read the rest yet.
And so, with a flourish of his tailored coat and a confident stride, Raymond embarked on his path, knowing that the true test of his abilities and his unyielding will had only just begun.
Harry Potter : The Cardmaster Chronicles
Book&Literature · Mr_Cuak
Thanks! didn't know that
Nick immediately fell out of the fugue state he was in during the end of the forging and had to grab the anvil to steady himself. Pain wracked his body as the strain made itself apparent throughout it. Nick also felt like he had a hole in his stomach that needed to be filled as hunger gripped him. He had planned for this however and took some lembas bread from Greed before eating a couple of bites. Almost immediately his hunger waned as the bread worked it's magic but he could still feel a faint trace of hunger once his body fully digested it.-
Harry potter: The ringmaker
Book&Literature · loskro
Great story so far haven't read a witcher story/forgotten realms on this side this good for a long while great job!
ch 10 Chapter 9: Time of the Moon
A Faerûn Wizard in the World of the Witcher
Video Games · Its_def_mark
Could not have worked if it wasn't the main characters name lol
anybody guess what world he is in?
DC: with D&D Artificer
TV · Lythan_Page
Already excited :)
ch 15 Chapter 15
Avatar The Last Airbender: Not Avatar
Anime & Comics · Vandalizer