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Fantasy · Suryaada
man I think u should use some editor tools to fix ur sentences of the novel there r many mistakes in each sentences like names, relationships. he or she so use more editor tool to fix it. ur novel has potential but these small mistakes r bringing it down.
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Fantasy · Suryaada
fixed this sentence
Ummmm!~~" Gongsun Wan'er's muffled moans echoed in her mother's room, as his cock entered her. Her mother's body shook violently when Shi Tian's penis reached deep inside her womb, Shi Tian had now reached her mother's womb with kissed him deeply, and he started moving his hips back and forth and increasing his speed as time went on.
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Fantasy · Suryaada
man mother and son not daughter. plz correct ur sentences
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Fantasy · Suryaada
man plz correct ur sentences between he and she. it is confusing to read. I can't understand which pov i am reading.
At first, he was a little confused, and didn't understand what was going on. However, he did not make any sound or movement because he did not want to embarrass her.
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Fantasy · Suryaada
there should be man but mostly women so that he can conquer them and make them his personal slaves😈😈. and man u should create some protoganist like characters who will give him a tough fight. but not the typical arrogent ones but sharp minded and cunning.
I don't usually get a lot of comments or feedback so I am writing this to ask ur opinion. I wanna add a bit more fantasy/supernatural element to this story, maybe some other characters who have different superpowers, do you guys like this idea? Tell me what you think.
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Fantasy · Author_1188
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
can't do that until u change ur mind. atleast add 2 more plz
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Fantasy · SleepDeprivedSloth
hey author mc is still neive and stupid he believes he has to return the favor eveytime someone does something for him.