James_Owino

5d

Commented

Personally I would have chose a system that allowed me to get the powers of any char that dealt with the concept death and one of the essences.

Chuckling, the Source said, "Divine adaptability and the gift of jack-of-all-trades. You have received powerful allies indeed. Now go - your new life awaits beyond the veil!"

Reborn As Hades (DxD)

Anime & Comics · illyisabot

James_Owino

1mth

Posted

Definitely cooked with this one. keep up the with and don't drop.

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James_Owino

1mth

Commented

Yes please

Sandevistan - Yes/No

Where I am ?

Anime & Comics · Nashi103

James_Owino

2mth

Posted

I'm definitely biased because I was looking for a komi fic, but I don't care. Keep up the good work, and don't drop

Where I am ?

Anime & Comics · Nashi103

James_Owino

2mth

Posted

The Story is really good and I like how it's not moving slow, but the main problem I have is that there is too many abilities and things going on. I suggest mixing most of the fire abilities into simply "fire manipulation" and moving a bit slower

One Piece: Anime System (On Hold)

Anime & Comics · Seven_deadly_sins_

James_Owino

2mth

Posted

The idea is very intriguing and I'd like to see a full story, but the writing quality is sub par at best. some ways to fix this is by making the dialog and character pov separate paragraphs, and try to make paragraphs shorter or split them.