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I am writing this review early, however I hope the author ends up seeing this. The pacing is very consistent, and I do like some of the vocabulary and literary devices used. The plot is strong from the beginning, as is quick at the action and thrill, which is a nice starter to utilize the plot as a method to reveal the worldbuilding. I do feel like some phrases could be reworded, and sometimes the writing is a bit unprofessional, if the author is really serious in writing this novel. I think it is better if you write in a way that is more concise and fluid, rather than using closed or foreign words if you want a fluid translation, but ultimately that is up to you. To address the biggest problem, your tense. Sometimes I see you write verbs such as 'don't' instead of 'doesn't', and you can confuse yourself with present tense and past tense when recounting events and just the story-line in general. Here is my constructive criticism, if you don't like what I'm saying then just tell me, but I am here to give advise. (For context though, I do exert the same energy as the other reviews.)

This is one of the very few novels I enjoy reading on the web. The story is fresh, I love the critical thinking of the protagonist, the worldbuilding is amazing and detailed.... and in particular, enjoy your writing style! You have potential, keep it up :)