Hello. Author here. For some reason, I cannot update "Magic in the Family". Webnovel's software won't allow me. I apologize for the inconvenience while I attempt to get to the bottom of this. I will aim to have a double update this Thursday. :(
ch 12 Scents
Fantasy · Rowan Jayy
It's been two paragraphs and I like this guy.
He had been walking along the Kaeje river for many days and his gray robes now looked dirty due to exposure to the elements. His robes along with his black eyes and messy black hair that tracked till his shoulders made him look like a disheveled beggar but Yin did not mind such things and kept moving along the river until he reached the outskirts of the town of Xian in Qing province. It was a forested area where a few second tier sects practiced cultivation arts.
Eastern · Kalki_gsk
Quick note on dialogue punctuation: , belong inside the dialogue tag. Wrong: "Please stop staring at me", he said, hiding his face behind his wings. Correct: "Please stop staring at me," he said, hiding his face behind his wings. A small thing, but it will make your grammar better. :)
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Fantasy · 1AM
Yeah... I'd probably have the same reaction.
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Urban · Tiphereth
Any suggestions on how I can increase my score?
Mom for the win!
However, the empress apparently had great hearing and managed to listen to their intentions,[You try to touch my son... And you better forget ever seeing the light of day again...]
Fantasy · Breno_Ranyere
Let's go, Mom!!
[Good! Don't move! I'll be done soon!] his mother declared, [Every single one of you better start praying to whatever gods you believe might save you now... You're going to need it!!]
Fantasy · Breno_Ranyere
wonder how long she'll stick around for... or how long it will take her to start doing things to make his life worse so he'll want to go back to his old life.
'Ah, shame... I was really enjoying watching you jumping out of the bed while shouting 'Come out, wings!!' over and over again!' Dorothy commented.
Fantasy · Breno_Ranyere
Thank you for the kind words. Hope you stick around for Soren's story. :)
Hmmm... that doesn't seem healthy. XD
Running Away From Life
Fantasy · Breno_Ranyere
Thanks for the review. I'll work on my style moving forward. :)
Daw. Thank you. <3
ch 0 9 Curse in the Family
Fantasy · Rowan Jayy
That doesn't sound healthy -_-
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History · modestbaddie
Thanks. I hope I figure it out too... you'd think they'd want me to upload???
ch 12 Scents
Magic in The Family
Fantasy · Rowan Jayy