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god she just keeps screaming and crying
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
suchlike?
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
not sure if even author knows.
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
so its a helpless female with no choice but to be with someone she promised to tear apart becuz hes strong? are we supposed to like this wraven guy? Am i supposed to care about ashers, ashera, aquira??? not even sure about the mc name...
ch 0 1 Prologue
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
haunt- should be hunt.
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
seems to have misspelled the name again. aquira?
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
"it indicated ashera." Bad grammar here. The whole paragraph needs work on the wording and grammar to make sense. my only understanding comes from assumptions as to what the author means.
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
seems that the name of the character was misspelled to ashers?
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
also didn't notice, but groin is misspelled
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
strange wording, such as "sire" and "quacks" it reads confusingly.
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
confusing introduction
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
slight mistype with the "such a lady" the comma and space are incorrect.
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus
cliche, im falling asleep
David could feel the heat on his face and began to panic as it got closer and closer. But even though he was panicking, his pride still would not allow him to seem weak. "So what!?" He finally screamed out. These two words said it all. But he still continued: "I am the Village Chief's son. So what if I steal your woman? So what if I try to kill you!? You should have just died! Why did you have to come back!?" David's lips curled up into a smile as he looked up at the Everling Brothers. "But I am not the only one at fault! Those two sold you out for a few silver! Your two long-time friends both turned their backs on you, just like how your fiancee dropped you in favor of someone with power!"
Alantina Online: The Greatest Sword Mage Reborn As A Weak NPC
Fantasy · invayne
"i will reach the peak even faster" "i will take my time".....
Crystal clear water, the glow of the moonlight as it reflected off everything it touched. The gentle wind that was blowing past his face. All of it seemed surreal. Vance sat down on a nearby rock and took some time to gaze up at the starry sky. He wanted to reach the top. He wanted to reclaim his previous glory, but he felt maybe… just maybe, he should take some time to take in the world he breezed through before now that he seemed to be stuck inside it. "I will take my time this time…."
Alantina Online: The Greatest Sword Mage Reborn As A Weak NPC
Fantasy · invayne
boring... the journey is most of the fun. when it comes to "knowing the future" it almost always becomes a collectathon, just checking things off a list to become stronger and getting those opportunities endlessly. what is the motivation for him to need to be stronger, why does he want to be the best in his past life?
"I will make it back to the top…. Even faster than before…." Vance mumbled to himself.
Alantina Online: The Greatest Sword Mage Reborn As A Weak NPC
Fantasy · invayne
lame. i hate these things where there is clearly a op class but its justified because it's hard to become or exclusive etc. it somewhat negates hard work or other things that make a protagonist special. it also makes no sense that anyone would be fine being a mage when sword mage is all that and a bag of chips. sure its good for solo but it clearly would be amazing for team play, unless for instance it has some class exclusive passive like "too proud to party" since its strong.
Sword mages were not just your simple mage with a sword but warriors who could wield grand magic that even mages were unable to use. They could even heal to a certain extent which made them one of the best solo classes out there, but the prerequisites to become one were hard. One had to be able to have strength and intelligence as well as the health and mana to keep yourself going. Even agility was needed in order to evade attacks, as sword mages were front-line attackers.
Alantina Online: The Greatest Sword Mage Reborn As A Weak NPC
Fantasy · invayne
bro is a menace, thats sexual assualt
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Fantasy · Euphemismsofhiatus