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Tales_Within_Me
male LV 11A guy who just has a lot of tales within him, and wants to share them with the world. You can also find me on IG: @tales.within.me
2021-05-26 Joined IndiaBadges 11
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Alright. I found this chapter a little lacking. The element of surprise is there at the end, but the tension that was supposed to be there as he was searching for the meaning of his life was a little lacking. Could have done a better job there. And the anger that he had expressed that he was helpless could have been done in a much better manner. The emotion was shown very slightly, whilst helplessness and anger should have been stressed more there. A good read. Keep it up!
ch 0 3 The Price.
Chalice Of Blood
Urban · THE_WORDSMITH
A really well penned chapter. Way to go The blending of the imminent danger and his situation was perfect. And the ending cliffhanger is neither too rushed nor too lacking. It's a perfect drop, in my opinion. To the next chapter
ch 0 2 The Second Chance.
Chalice Of Blood
Urban · THE_WORDSMITH
Okay, my thoughts on the first chapter. It has been well paced, the beginning and the mystery surrounding the perpetrators have been portrayed well. Will need some fixing of Grammar and a re-read will allow you to find some omitted words in some paragraphs that your eyes might have missed. All in all, an extremely good start.
ch 0 1 Collision.
Chalice Of Blood
Urban · THE_WORDSMITH
A well done job indeed
"Jack Brown and Sarah Robinson are the winners of this competition", read the paper. After having a close look at Mitchell's face, he resembled the old man he had knocked into yesterday. Once more, he had a smile as he thought of the perfect disguise Mitchell wore.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Kind of, yeah. You'll find a lot of similarities, but there will be differences as well. Be ready
"If this was a murder then, how did the culprit escape without opening the window and the door? It was locked from the inside", he thought as he looked back at the question. He was now sure that it was murder, as he felt the bumps were slightly different, meaning that the quantity of liquid that were in those cups were different.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
You're welcome !!
Thank you! Will do and try not to disappoint you!
🤣🤣🤣🤣
He sat down and pulled out his phone, looking into who the man was and why he had gone missing. 'I will still anyhow take credit for Jack's work. Just let him do all the groundwork. We'll let him know that this man could be a potential person of interest', he thought as he typed a message and sent it to him.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
We'll see if he really is capable of being the next Sherlock
'Time to put my observation skills to the test. Why did Sherlock choose me, and why did the system say that I was a hundred percent compatible? I shall find a silver of the answers I am looking for too', he thought as a smirk began to form on his face, and his eyes began to take in every detail around him.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Ahhh, Just wait until you read maybe the next one? I think it's 15.
He pulled out his gun from his holster and was about to knock the door down when a woman came walking out of the door and had flushed cheeks. There were some visible drops right over her cleavage, and she was licking her tongue seductively as she passed by Jack.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Indeed it is
He was also waiting on the autopsy reports from the first body, and here he was dealing with another one within a time of 24 hours. He began to wonder how Sherlock was the best in the business, and for 30-plus years.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
It's not Hatred. it's more of a matter of Honor. The Holmes name is famous for solving all the peculiar cases. And since there has not been another Sherlock in their family, they will stop anyone who has the talent to rise. To protect their Honor.
"Even if he has the talent to become the next Sherlock, I will not allow him to. I will keep the Holmes name safe, be it the right way, or the wrong way", he smiled as he completed his wine and left the party, taking a break from all the formalities which was tiring to him.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Jack gets hate more than love. He needs some love in his life lol 😂
He sat down and pulled out his phone, looking into who the man was and why he had gone missing. 'I will still anyhow take credit for Jack's work. Just let him do all the groundwork. We'll let him know that this man could be a potential person of interest', he thought as he typed a message and sent it to him.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
And unless a mistake is made, you can't nab them
ch 13 Investigation's On!
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
It's a roundabout case. indeed it's going to be hard. Being against someone who is as smart as him is going to be tough to solve.
ch 13 Investigation's On!
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
I hope so too!
ch 12 A Connection?
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Guess there is a ship already?
"What are you doing here?", he asked as he looked at her. She smiled at him faintly and handed him a card, which contained her details. He looked at the card and back at her, as he was still shaking from the fact that she worked in forensics.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
🤣🤣🤣🤣
"What are you doing here?", he asked as he looked at her. She smiled at him faintly and handed him a card, which contained her details. He looked at the card and back at her, as he was still shaking from the fact that she worked in forensics.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
From what I have read here, the book is extremely good A totally refreshing Idea with the way Vampires and Hunters have been portrayed in this novel. It isn't exactly reincarnation either, since Chris underwent an experiment of some sorts with his own free will. Kudos to that point. For the people that are wondering if the book is worth a read, I would definitely say it is, due to the way it is penned and strung along together. Though I also have a hunch that the readers would want more, so for the binge readers, I suggest you be patient. The pacing of the story is neither too fast nor too slow for me. There might be people who will prefer a little slower or faster, but I feel the blending is a good mix, taking us between fast and slow, keeping the shifting barely noticeable. All in all, a good book to read, and looking forward to more chapters in the future!
Chalice Of Blood
Urban · THE_WORDSMITH