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Are you still looking for ideas for this story? I had some, and I've spent a long time thinking if I should tell you, but my plot ideas clashed with some elements you added like 'The Supreme Villain of Destiny' and such so I was very undecided. However the lack of updates and seeing you write new stories with similar premises made me the decision for me (Warning, this is going to be long): Despite me liking it, the main problem with this story (in y opinion, of course) is that you are obsessing with the premise 'The Heroines hear MC thoughts' to the point that almost everything is about their reaction to his any situation, his reactions to theirs (senseless) reactions, and their reactions to this... The story lacks a true plot, something to move forwards to. The nearest concept you had was the 'Start Over'. You alluded to his 'retries' and this being his 'holiday run', as such he was not taking anything very seriously until the 'Villain Halo' and his new 'immunity' to be send back any time the plot is 'broken'. What I would do is this: World plot: The planet is in danger because there are a lot of apocalyptic events about to happen (Trixeha, invasion of Alien Gods, the plot of the Persona games, the release of a zombie virus to decimate the population...). The spirit of the world choose a few key figures to stop this (certain Heroes) and resets the world (spending some of its accumulated energy) each time any fail. However several outside entities have decided to plunder the world of all its resources and energies by using avatars (that corrupt and usurp the 'Heroes') and forcing their own version of the plots, however the resets stop them and undo their plundering, so now they also are trying to delay the apocalyptic events until they have stole enough energy that the World no longer can do another reset. Story plot: In one of the resets one particular soul so damaged that it couldn't be restored and reseted (for example, in the final batle of Persona 3, the people who were transformed into Shadows could be used as an excuse). The Spirit of the world, detecting a chance, summoned an alternative version of the soul from another world who absorbed the remains, and infused it with power to protect it from corruption and the resets with the hope that he would become his champion. However the Outside Entities detected it and interfered. As they couldn't corrupt him, they lied and manipulated him to follow 'his plot as the villain'. The rewards he receives are, in truth, the Spirit attempt to empower him to save the world, while the Entities try to use him as another source to weaken the world and stop the resets. Now to the actual story: The Spirit of the World, as a last resource, is the one exposing the MC thoughts to the heroines to change things and cause chaos so the MC realizes is okay to try to change things. The Entities tried to stop it by declaring the 'Villain Halo' and the 'stop of the resets' and increased the 'rewards' as a means to exhaust the world faster. However the chaos will inevitably cause one of the apocalyptic events to happen sooner, with the world resetting once again. The MC will notice the discrepancy and that 'not following the plot' is not the cause for the resets, so will truly begin to look for answers. At the same time the heroines will keep hearing his thoughts, and perhaps the closest heroines to him manage to remember more and more. I hope this helps to inspire you somewhat, and that you continue writting. Thanks for all your work and effort.

If you want ideas, then this is mine: Usually this kind of stories goes like this: Villain stopping and stealing Protagonist chances and women for himself, weakening him until he kills him. And then boom: multiple protagonists and more women and repeating the cycle. It becomes boring because the old women and relationships are soon forgotten for the new ones. So, my suggestion: Make Riser acquire a hobby/goal outside the protagonist/system. He has reincarnated and is rich. He should try to create something that he considered fantasy/fiction in his previous world: - Like creating the Animus machine and integrating it with videogames to learn and live fantasy stories. - Colonize Mars by himself and his personal harem. - Become a famous writer/film maker using works from his previous world. - Found an investigation center with the goal of altering people race (creating things like Elfs, catgirls, angels...) Anything beyond the system and the plot. How the heroines react to his ideas would be very interesting.

Why did the girl antagonize him from the very start?

If she has that much control, she could reform the earth itself into anything she wants.