HeyIAmNikki

7mth

Replied to Anaxor

like i said, someone else said that idfk who he is

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Earth's Greatest Magus

Fantasy · Avan

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Replied to Isaac_black

Oh yeah, nw it may confuse me sometimes but its still really good

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Replied to Isaac_black

Then please just change it

Adelita was stunned, the energy was huge and it didn't only affect Isiah but it affected everything near it, even her felt something different in the air and that's why she started to freak out .

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Replied to VOID_

No

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Commented

He passed it, but he couldn't pass?

Alfred was a low-ranked mage, he passed the evaluation test for years now but he couldn't pass it not even with the notes of his brother .

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Commented

Why do u nearly always put an exclamation nark after questions?

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First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Posted

Started of really strong in every field, but the writing quality went down rather quickly. Im at chapter 24 now and since some chapters the author just switched from past in one paragraph to present in the next and they also just often use question or exclamation parks at the wrong spots, put eitger a space between the end of tge sentence and the Punctuation mark or put no punctuation mark at all, but still a space. Some sentences also just dont make any sense. I really hooe this gets better as the story progresses. But now to the good parts, the charcter building, world building and everything is really good and got me really hooked on the story. So if those ggrammar mistaked and all weren't there, then it would be nearlx perfect. But i think i makr it seem a bit worse than it actually is, because I have definetely seen worse. I would definetely recommend this story tho

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Commented

Can relate

His mind was going numb again; he felt drowsy. He couldn't think straight anymore.

First Stygian Diviner:Apocalypse

Fantasy · Isaac_black

HeyIAmNikki

1yr

Commented

The lights were focused on him. To the crowd, he was the star of the show; they were all joined here to purify their souls by offering him to the other side...