I think it would be better if you did something to indicate the past.something like:a few hours agoorflashback you know, to make it flow
And, "Hiro... I'm in love with someone else"
Fantasy 路 TurtleMaster6319
* he felt more than/then that....sorry, my English is good馃槃
Heartbroken. That was an understatement, because he felt even more that that, he felt betrayed, set up, even sabotaged, and all by the very one woman he loves.
Fantasy 路 TurtleMaster6319
to me, he seems stupid.
Was he possibly thinking playing stupid would fool her mother? She knew he wasn't that stupid... or at least, she thought him not to be?
Fantasy 路 Czzi
This reminds me of Gira Gira by Ado
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Fantasy 路 Blazuku
what's his age?
Archie woke up in his bed, gasping for air. Sunlight was breaching his curtains, alerting him that it was morning. He quickly threw off his bedsheets to look at his destroyed leg, but to his surprise, his leg was fine. Archie looked at his side, noticing that he wasn't bleeding anymore. Hell, it appeared to have never started bleeding in the first place. 'System, tell me everything you know about Night Terrors.' Archie commanded the system in his mind. A pale blue text box appeared in the centre of his vision.
Fantasy 路 ShadowAmeratsu
honestly I hope he gets hit by a dose of reality and matures.
If his Mother was truly gone, along with most of humanity itself, he knew what she would want from him: to use what little strength he had to help others. Even if he wasn't much of a hero himself, it was simply the torch left to him.
Fantasy 路 DelzGB
hahaha I completely forgot I made this comment, you're right, now that I've read 300 something chapters the flaw makes sense and I like this book.
Sunny thought about it. Strangely, his Flaw was silent, not forcing him to answer one way or the other.
Fantasy 路 Guiltythree
Heaven's gate: A necromancer's requiem
ch 176 Eiko鈥檚 Monster Grade
Fantasy 路 Elyon
also I feel like that the more I know about the mc the more I'll get immersed in the novel. maybe an auxiliary chapter about the characters info or a side chapter that explains his sickness. (if it hasn't been explained in the novel. I haven't read above 50 chapters yet).
it would be better to say "don't hm, hm me, say something!" it sounds better
"Don't hm, hm, hm, just tell me something!"
Fantasy 路 World_Simulator
what's his age?
A single tear that was filled with all the frustration, humiliation, and anger accumulated from the last 15 years trickled down his cheek.
Fantasy 路 HideousGrain
shouldn't it be"He was smaller and leaner..."?
Vampire cried out. It was too late to back out anyways. He was taller and leaner than Wolfgang. But he was still more musculer and bigger than other half baked werewolves I killed.
Fantasy 路 TheBarak
then probably the element of death?
There were many questions floating in his head. He had come to terms with the fact that he was a Dark Mage who awakened the Element of Darkness, but now it turned out that he was wrong. He hadn't awakened the Element of Darkness but something else entirely.聽
Fantasy 路 Demonic_angel
why did she kill his family?
Anna was still debating whether to eliminate Noel or not. On the one hand, Noel could become this country big shot and prevented the demons from taking over. On the other hand, she had gained the second chance. Her power should increase by leaps and bounds since she knew many things from her past life.
Fantasy 路 Fixten
I'm not a genius or something but won't he still be alive in this timeline
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Fantasy 路 Averanges
'ruler of blood' stigma
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Fantasy 路 xavier_101
is he without magic or an element?
Truth to be told, I do not have any feelings towards this eldest daughter of the Lan family. In fact, I hate their family as a whole. They abandoned me as soon as they found out I didn't have an innate element, when they were practically begging my parents to agree to this engagement before I was born. Lan Gui Ying? We've never even talked to each other, much less become affectionate. That's why I didn't feel anything when I saw her intimately chatting with the third young master of the Li family. Jealousy? What a farce.
Fantasy 路 Cyclxne
why is it like this?I spaced it out to make it readable.
And, "Hiro... I'm in love with someone else"
Incubus's Blood
Fantasy 路 TurtleMaster6319