Haya_Mercano

1yr

Commented

You said she passed out. How can she shout if she passed out?

"James!" Selena shrieked, she was so grateful that her husband had come to help her. I don't know where it came from, but James arrived just in time to help Selena who was in danger.

Pregnant for me

Urban · AmaneDian

Haya_Mercano

1yr

Commented

Why you keep writing “gown”? Gown is never simple. It’s worn for parties and events, etc. I believe it should be “dress” instead.

"That wasn't a comparison. You implied that she paid too much attention to details, in an extreme manner. Maybe you haven't noticed, but you do that too. It's just a dinner, put on a pair of jeans trousers or a simple gown. You don't have to overthink it. And I'm sure regardless of what you wear, you will look better than anyone else in there," Tom assured her with a wink as he rubbed her arms affectionately.

One Wild Night

Urban · Miss_Behaviour

Haya_Mercano

2yr

Commented

The conversations are so long and very repititive that it is making the story dragging and boring. The story is good, just don’t drag it too much or don’t keep repeating things over and over again.

ch 58 You will know everything when time comes!