Siven19 - Profile

I thank you for having listened to my advice after all it is your story and I have no right to tell you anything about it but I appreciate that you considered it

don't worry your story is going pretty well leaving aside the fact I already mentioned and I hope you continue to make the story as you prefer to make it

I like the story but you focus too much on writing about the characters it takes a template from which makes it just a bit of story and the rest just information from a template character

actually in the description it said that the original story is found with the same name in the search engine

Tienes hasta el momento un buen desarrollo de la trama y los personajes ....….…………….....................,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,,.,..,,..,.,,.,.,.,..,.,........,.........,,,.....