I like the way you make all the situations and abilities have a logical development within what is their world also the plot is original and good, but for me it would be cooler if you add dialogue in the scenes where there are more emotions and not summarize them, to be able to immerse us more in the plot and have more closeness to the characters making us feel what they feel through dialogue, descriptions and thoughts of each one enriching the development of your characters. (This is a well-intentioned opinion from a non-expert). Overall I loved your story. 😍😍
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I like the way you make all the situations and abilities have a logical development within what is their world also the plot is original and good, but for me it would be cooler if you add dialogue in the scenes where there are more emotions and not summarize them, to be able to immerse us more in the plot and have more closeness to the characters making us feel what they feel through dialogue, descriptions and thoughts of each one enriching the development of your characters. (This is a well-intentioned opinion from a non-expert). Overall I loved your story. 😍😍
An Adventure in the One Piece World.
Fantasy · BoltingPigeon